Also, so no one asks, I have a doctor's appointment in an hour, that's why I'm not at school now.
Anyway... I refined it a little to be different from last night's.
I see you smile at the false world
I watch you glare through closed eyes
I see my old best friend
Where did he go?
Why did he leave?
[chorus]
All good things have come to an end
This is where my winter will begin
Coldness, ice, this is all that is known
This deathless wasteland that will only grow
[/chorus]
I watch you set yourself ablaze
I'm waiting for your flames to cool
I know you're never coming home
You've carelessly discarded the person i loved
this is my winter,
this is what it's come to
i love you, i miss you, i wish you would come home
but this is my winter
this ice cold wasteland
[chorus repeat x2]
i love you, i miss you, i need you to come home
i cant move on but the death in me will only grow
because this ice cold wasteland
has become all i know
2006-10-16 05:03:55 · 8 answers · asked by HA! 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Well, how awesome to see a budding songwriter. I also started writing at 13... and some of my very best works were back then. (It seems only yesterday, but here I am 28 now.) It is lovely!
You need to continue writing, because it is such a great way to let your emotions out. The teen years are the absolute hardest ones to understand, your body is changing, and you are stuck in between adult and child. It is so difficult, because you are too old to do kids stuff, but not yet old enough to do adult stuff. Just keep on writing, it is the only thing that got me where I am today. Good luck and hugs to you!
2006-10-16 05:14:49 · answer #1 · answered by Cutelilminxy 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Gosh for being only 13 you write awesomely! (if thats a word lol.)
I think it is really good i ain't even lying. i think it is like as good as mine if not yours is prolly better!!! don't stop writing!!! cuz if you're writing this good at 13 then a few more yrs who knows how more amazing your writing will be!! i really liked the chorus and if you don't have a song title yet i think it should be "This deathless wasteland" gosh thats is a good song!!! i really like it. oh word of advice though. Alot of people are likely to steal off here so i wouldn't put any work on here that you really don't want to be ripped off or anything cuz i have seen it happen on here someone asks people to rate a poem they wrote then the next thing you see that poem on a different Q and they are like i wrote this poem can you rate it? its like i just wanna be like YOU stole that!!! ugh gets me mad and i don't want that happen to your work cuz it is really good!it was really good though awesome!! and its just amazing you're only 13 and write like that!!! good Luck!!!
2006-10-16 15:54:48 · answer #2 · answered by I Luv Joel Madden!! 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
actually I would have never asked why. I'm 14 and attend cyberschool. So I thought that might be it. I hate when they ask. Anyways. I really enjoyed your work. I think you have great talent. I have always been good at writing also. Altho i don't think I am as good as you. i have been told I am excellent. Keep it up. Writing always makes me clear my mind, get out my feelings and whatnot. I give you a 10!!! great job!
2006-10-16 05:11:48 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
SOUNDS PRETTY DEEP FOR A 13 YEAR OLD ,
IT IS VERY INTERESTING , WOULD LIKE TO KNOW WHY YOU ARE THINKING SUCH DEEP THOUGHTS ?
MY DAUGHTERS LIKE TO WRITE ALSO , BUT I SOMETIMES QUESTION THEIR WRITNGS , BECAUSE IT IS ONE WAY TO EXPRESS HOW YOU ARE TRULEY FEELING ABOUT CERTAIN THINGS ,
I HOPE YOU ARE OKAY ,
A LITTLE CONCERNED !
KEEP IT UP , IF THAT 'S WHAT YOU ENJOY DOING , WRITING IS A GOOD WAY TO RELEASE ALL KINDS OF TENSIONS AND FEELINGS
: ) LB
PS , YOU ARE A REAL HEAVY THINKER !
2006-10-16 05:21:01 · answer #4 · answered by Lois B 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's so angry and sad for a 13 year old. Sorry for whatever inspired it. Effective though.
2006-10-16 05:09:32 · answer #5 · answered by JB 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
nice work!!
I think you're extremely talented. Keep up d great work.
GoodLuck!
2006-10-16 05:07:22 · answer #6 · answered by Yvonne Mystic 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You write very well for any age, keep it up.
2006-10-16 05:05:55 · answer #7 · answered by Sue Chef 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is great. You write well. I enjoyed reading it.
2006-10-16 09:40:08 · answer #8 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋