I will tell you now this poem is really eerie and dark as I suffer from bipolar disorder and I have a very dark and mysterious brain!!! This poem has hidden meaning..it's complicated and hard to figure out. Let me know what you think of it?? It is called Slipping!
Slipping
Pressured times are beating
in the chamber of my mind
Chains that seem to drag me
choke away my mind
Twisted hearts are bleeding
smell of continuous death
Rigormortis is setting in
it's reeking on my breath
As the maggots eat upon me
and prey upon what's there
I realize within this time
there's nothing more to fear
So to let loose in my chest, air
let the bastards eat my lungs
I hear the demons talking
the devils speaking tongues
I look into the dungeon
as he rips away my heart
Feeding it to his slayers
as the blood drips from their chin
He laughs to me out loud
says this is wager for your sins
As he slowly walks towards me
and gouges out my eyes
My brain, slipping
dies
Deangela
2006-10-15 18:02:32 · 14 answers · asked by slip2eternity 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Here is what my poem is about!! It is simply a reflection of trying times in my life. It reflects on my near death experience and my lifelong struggles with nightmares and a 4 1/2 year abusive relationship also it has to do with parents who never said they loved me or my sister! It is simply just a reflection of my life!! Yes, it is about suffering from depression and anxiety! It is saying that I try and try to understand things until I can't understand anything. I had a very huge fear of death growing up and then due to having toxemia while pregnant I faced death and realized feeling the hand of death upon you is no different than feeling life! I have had some very trying times in my life and faced alot of "demons" in my life!!! Also, yes I have been known to drink myself into a cold unfeeling state just to escape my pain. However, I do not smoke..it's gross!!! Anyhow, thanks a million to all the comments and I appreciate it!! I will post some more of my poems in a later date!!!
2006-10-15 18:57:40 · update #1
Ace! Better than a lot of "dark" poems I've read.
2006-10-15 18:05:29 · answer #1 · answered by Rollercoaster 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
THIS POEM MUST BE DISCRIBING DEPRESSION...starting with a stress headache, too many things going 'round in circles in your mind...try swallowing them in alcohol smoking cigarettes to calm those nerves...you've hit that rock bottom and you can't get any lower than that ....says a 'lil voice from deep down inside..... from the pit of your stomach to be exact... the place that makes you feel so sick....but why am I waiting...just where is 'god' rite now ? and why can't the 'big guy' hear any of my prayers? You then start realizing.... your prayers are too demanding and you're now losing all hope....the deeper into depression you're slipping and only a miracle could possibly help you to survive now..............(well that is what I thought your 'poem' was about ...let me know if I am right or totally wrong ..........I did ,however, think it was well put together and you worded things rather bluntly....great job!~~~~~~Bee
2006-10-16 01:47:30 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
=O Whoa, this is a very scary poem! But it's good! It really puts you in that sort of melancholy state of mind. I'm an amateur poet but I'll try deciphering it......something seems to be killing you inside, and your dying inside because you're being punished for what you did. Karma, perhaps? And it seems that you did not exactly sin on purpose but because you were 'pressured'. You also don't care anymore that you're being punished for your sin. You're giving up and allowing yourself to suffer, to slip........
2006-10-16 01:09:51 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very powerful and deep
I think the end should be
My brain, slipping
slipping till I die
These kinds of poems is what fuels the emos and goths of out time KEEP IT UP!
2006-10-16 01:08:07 · answer #4 · answered by EMO cupcake 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You're able to voice your thoughts and feelings real well in the poem. Thats great!
good jOb^^
2006-10-16 01:13:20 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good job... but a little too dark for me. Too lazy right now to dig for hidden meaning.
2006-10-16 01:07:34 · answer #6 · answered by Hey Polly 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
very good nice dark poetic qualities
2006-10-16 01:15:45 · answer #7 · answered by L.J. 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
grow up
and
accept responsibility
you can stew in their juices
or
you can
cook for yourself
and live in
a banquet hall
2006-10-16 01:07:18 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
WoW
That is a great one. I like it
2006-10-16 01:03:57 · answer #9 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
very imaginative...!
expresses the deepest feeling
2006-10-16 01:05:35 · answer #10 · answered by Jubei 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋