As I walk down that hall
past all the friends
past all the teachers
As I walk past them all
I keep my eyes down
looking at the ground
as it slowly passes under me
I look at the ground
instead of in the faces
Faces of people who talk
People who talk about me
I keep my eyes down
instead of seeing them all
Those people who
tease and torment me
I keep my eyes down
to hide all the pain
The pain they induce in me
The pain that will never go away
2006-10-15 03:11:09 · 14 answers · asked by candy12424 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
The writer has committed a blunder and has been thrashed and guilt shame and humiliation felt deep inside the heart is so beautifully expressed.
2006-10-15 03:18:40 · answer #1 · answered by khayum p 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is very good i was visualising the person walking down that corridor with their head down, and how they might be feeling...is it you?...i hope not.
The pain they induce in me
The pain that will never go away
Dont give them the power,
to make you feel this way
so when you walk down that hall
Raise your head, not bow it in shame
Be like the pheonix, rise from the flames
Not every dark cloud brings a shower of rain.
2006-10-15 10:31:45 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good, but if u wan 2emphasize on the talking behind your back, or the pain you have to endure, then maybe you should repeat it y'know? So far your poem is like a running story, it should centre around a feeling or an emotion...Bt thts imho after all so....Bt keep up the good work
2006-10-15 10:23:23 · answer #3 · answered by Zenylt 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Loved the poem. It is something EVERYONE can relate to. We've all lived through the pain of Jr. High and High School. It is very sad, however. It is good that you are expressing yourself with writing. I give you an A+!
2006-10-15 10:21:03 · answer #4 · answered by Daphne 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very good.. I think a lot of people will identify with these feelings..
2006-10-15 10:31:36 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very good! Do some more and get published!
2006-10-15 10:24:01 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Look them in the face gorgeous,
and say,
"Be afraid! Be very afraid!"
2006-10-15 10:30:06 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good but at the same time its sad i am sorry if the is happening to you it its reeaallllyyyy has alot of feeling...
2006-10-15 10:26:02 · answer #8 · answered by billi jo bob 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a good poem. Very true.
2006-10-15 10:19:24 · answer #9 · answered by Nicki 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You poor thing! Let ME go to school with you and you just tell me who's doing this!!!
2006-10-15 10:20:29 · answer #10 · answered by nsupanda82 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋