To me, my love, you are the sky,
You are here every day,
I love your blue, just one of your colours,
The others I detest.
Tonight I know you'll hurt me 'till,
There are no thoughts of hurt left,
Instead I'll sleep through many thoughts,
Of hatred, all for you.
Tommorrow I'll wake up to the smell,
Of bacon you have cooked,
They'll only be one thought inside,
How could I ever hate you?
There are two kinds of men on earth,
These are the strong and weak,
By loving you I've learnt one thing,
I am too weak to hate you.
2006-10-14 21:49:29 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
i think u spoke from ur heart. I like it.
2006-10-14 21:52:14 · answer #1 · answered by ca4btts 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You sound like man in love. A man who is timid and hesitates to confront the problem he describes. Communication is a two way process. Begin it now...turn of the tv, radio etc., and talk face to face.Your decision should be yours. Live a life of torment, or live a life you control.
2006-10-15 04:59:44 · answer #2 · answered by demilspencer@yahoo.com 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Jeese, that is dark! very depressing story - one that draws you in so deep that you can't possibly pay attention to the actual framework of the poem. That is a good and bad thing. But overall, i'd say it is good....
2006-10-15 15:49:27 · answer #3 · answered by Christina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
tis cool you didnt let urself get overpowered by the ryhme which is reli hard wen writing a poem i dont get the bacon bit though
2006-10-15 04:58:14 · answer #4 · answered by aequus_bellum 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You need more work on your rhyme scheme that truly represent how you feel. Diction is good though
2006-10-15 04:53:47 · answer #5 · answered by nightflowerphil 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i am positive i could write a better one than that
2006-10-15 04:53:58 · answer #6 · answered by mycerrie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
um sad
2006-10-15 04:50:49 · answer #7 · answered by sleepwalker69 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i don't understand
2006-10-15 04:52:47 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋