Dear Son
your face has lost that youthfull smile that i so loved, you are Quickl runing the track called youth my son but you forgotten to take a break from this dreadfull burden that dieing lovers bare
i was at your bedside my son when the world came crashing down on your heart and i wept as the doctor read your test results , a rush of blood came throguh your head and I bent down and told god to take me instead, son I know of fair maidens or Gods but tonight I will speak of kindness to the heavens above for you my gentle loving son
2006-10-14 15:05:53 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
my name is deen i am 19 and i wrote this poem
2006-10-14 15:06:30 · update #1
do u like this poem dose it make you appreciate life a lil more
2006-10-14 15:19:02 · update #2
its beautiful, im 44 so it made me think of a lot of scenerios, i dont know if the person was dying because of drugs but that made the poem seem to point in that direction for me, good job, keep writing, ur obviously very talented....
2006-10-22 14:34:25 · answer #1 · answered by genieejj 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Who wrote this? It is really good! I am not sure who the characters in the story are suppose to be. I guess it could either be an inside or an outside force that if acknowledged would take the darkness from this person. Maybe the poet feels like one of these characters.? Either they know someone that they want to help or are that person and trying to realize how to help themselves? Just guesses here.... Emotion that is conveyed? umm... Someone taking away what is hurting in your life, careing for you. Love That is what it seems like to me anyway. Not sure if I understand it or not... Nice poem all the same... :)
2016-03-28 09:39:10 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Deen, people will pick up different emotions from your poem. That's what is most wonderful about poetry~ what it says to me is not necessarily what it says to you.
I like it, but are you writing what you know? Your poetry will have more of an impact, more emotion, if you write what you know, and I hope you don't "know" this poem. You are very young to understand a father's grief over a dying son.
Also, if you'd like to improve and I'm sure you would, it will help you to take an editing class and to learn to run a spell check. You are like me, though you have a knack for writing your editing and spelling skills leave something to be desired.
Best of luck!
2006-10-14 15:42:43 · answer #3 · answered by DidoDeeDee 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Grief, fear and saddness of lifes reality... Also the unconditional love of a parent for a child... take me instead- beautiful
You might need to work on technical merits of poetry but you have the emotions down pat!
try this site...
fanstory.com wonderful place for writers to learn and grow and hone their craft- Write On...Diny
2006-10-14 15:19:37 · answer #4 · answered by admiredi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is a bit of nostalgia, in the beginning, then there is sorrow, and a call to the inner strength(i think). Its a nice poem, but a little raw, u can smoothen it out a bit.
2006-10-21 21:51:47 · answer #5 · answered by Sunrise 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would say helplessness, saddens, and desperation are the emotions. My guess for the reason it was written is because the writer was feeling utterly hopeless and were frightened that they were going to lose someone they love.
2006-10-14 15:16:41 · answer #6 · answered by lady.ceridwen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Grief.
2006-10-14 15:11:16 · answer #7 · answered by Miz Teri 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It conveys to me that someone is praying for the life of someone who is dying.
2006-10-14 16:03:09 · answer #8 · answered by one_sahara 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
grief for the loss of his/her son & love for him
2006-10-14 15:15:22 · answer #9 · answered by Nicole 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋