A woman with a very fair skin, you really don't know how old is she. Long fair hair, very bright blue eyes and pink lips... She always wears white long coat. Distant look in her eyes... Deep voice... IS that sound like a ... good character in a book ?
2006-10-13 02:01:05 · 5 answers · asked by Orchid 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
lose the lips.
2006-10-13 02:12:37 · answer #1 · answered by lefang 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋
To be honest(I hope that you want honesty) No its not that good. First fair skin is just that its fair. No need to say very fair. Also you wouldn't need to write that you don't know how old she is because you are not telling at this point. But a good writer in my opinion would convey her age in telling about her mannerisms. Also bright blue eyes and pink lips with long hair indicates that she is probably young. Bright eyes are a sign of a young person also. Deep voice on the other hand is usually a sign of a older woman. But not always. Why would she always wear a long white coat? Anyway I would give it a little more thought and tweak your idea just a little. Good Luck
2006-10-13 09:16:15 · answer #2 · answered by smile4u 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No. the reader should know how old she is. Otherwise, they cannot interpret the character well.
2006-10-13 09:28:50 · answer #3 · answered by falcon_lady 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it does sound interesting but i would word it differently oh and describe the actual color of the hair. like cornsilk or something like that.
2006-10-13 10:54:27 · answer #4 · answered by bigcherrybomb 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u sud b more figurative n add more imagry to it den jus givin plain
description...
2006-10-13 10:23:56 · answer #5 · answered by MoOn 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋