she looks at you, you look at her, your eyes meet in the seeming less world of love and drama ,she smiles at you ,you smile at her ,you say hi she says hi , your souls entwine in the beauty of life , your spirit flows like the ocean in hers, you fall so deep into her gaze you seem to get lost in the pool of her eyes, your flirting is so obvious for the whole world to see, you get so excited when you see her you about pee, you plead on the inside " don’t go im crazy over you" but these feelings will never escape , never be herd , they will always just be feelings, bottled up in side like a genie , rub her twice shell give you a wish, love I don’t get , still to be uncovered, discovered, explored, people call us crazy ,weird ,insane, but its just love that’s made us this way, they call love gay, stupid, for losers, but it’s the closest thing we have to magic, love the greatest thing we have, so celebrate it all your life , maybe shell find out one day when you look into her eyes and there it is , the love flowing out bursting like fireworks , the truth burning inside , then it pops out , lovers for life .
2006-10-13 00:03:14 · 12 answers · asked by Trista 1 in Games & Recreation ➔ Hobbies & Crafts
lengths vary too much. and some unpoetic words. like insane, weird, hi, crazy...
2006-10-13 00:04:48 · answer #1 · answered by callieRach 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I tuned out on the 3rd line.
Try something The Backstreet Boys haven't sung.
2006-10-13 07:04:37 · answer #2 · answered by ladybugewa 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you must be in love . keep on writing .its a little long for me but its all right . i dont think i have ever seen the word pee in a poem untill now cool
2006-10-13 07:12:46 · answer #3 · answered by treefrog 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't really care for it. Sorry. Better luck on the next poem!
2006-10-13 08:04:19 · answer #4 · answered by lektio 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its pretty good..but I think the spacing could have been better
2006-10-13 08:19:42 · answer #5 · answered by vicizav_v 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good! Keep up the good work!
2006-10-13 07:14:49 · answer #6 · answered by Zombie 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a nice poem
2006-10-13 07:14:17 · answer #7 · answered by jeanjean 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
too drama queenish
2006-10-13 07:11:43 · answer #8 · answered by Val 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
different but hey, nice
2006-10-13 07:04:52 · answer #9 · answered by sweetme 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it- reminds me of my best friend
2006-10-13 07:05:58 · answer #10 · answered by nickname4anne 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋