Song writing is a big hobby of mine,i used to be a singer in a band but we broke up and I still write songs,i'm just wondering what you think. It's not finished but here it goes.....
That Day I Could See From Your Face
What's The Point When You Don't Know Me?
Being Faithful Is Not The Case
All That Pain You Could Never See.
You See Right Through Me Without A Care
What Do You Think When You're Alone?
Deep In My Heart I Have No Prayer
You Hurt Me Right Down To The Bone
Chorus:
Don't You Go And Break My Heart
Drop Me,Leave Me,All Alone
After That We Won't Restart
I'll Make Sure You're On Your Own.
That's all i have right now but i'll think of more. Feedback??
2006-10-12 12:59:50 · 8 answers · asked by Kelsey's Mommy<3 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
that chorus kicks @ss!...keep it up!!!
2006-10-12 13:04:24 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll be critical rather than polite being that I think it's the only thing that helps. The lyrics will sell. It's all been said when concerning lyrics about love, loss, people's faces, hearts, minds, hands, any body part really. The thing that makes for good lyrics is abstraction that the listener can relate to on some level. "Being Faithful is not the case" is nice, and so is "I'll make sure you're on your own", but to be brutally honest, the rest sounds like typical pop lyrics. It's not my intent to offend you or slam your writing, I am just giving my honest opinion in hopes that you truly want constructive criticism.
2006-10-12 20:12:36 · answer #2 · answered by twocircuits 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, you should add more. I write a lot of my songs with the same ryhme sceme you used.
2006-10-12 20:03:18 · answer #3 · answered by simi.sweet 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
oh gosh i love it. It is very indepth with out saying to much.. very heartfelt...keep on writing girl
2006-10-12 20:09:16 · answer #4 · answered by someones_cowgirl07 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats some deep lyrics there...but i like it!! u r a really good writer
2006-10-12 20:05:58 · answer #5 · answered by brandi686 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it.really really good
2006-10-12 20:06:17 · answer #6 · answered by I♥MRC&FOB<=P 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW....Deep lyrics.....you're a poet, but don't know it
2006-10-12 20:02:50 · answer #7 · answered by Powered by Rice 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it!! u r really good!
2006-10-12 20:08:04 · answer #8 · answered by Baby Girl♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋