Tuesday
Crashing through my window on tuesday night Will be my last night and sight See the grenade Theres no aid to it.....
Who's the star?
I have commited feloneys but the worst one I will ever commit will be tonight and Guess who's the star???YOU ARE...
nightmare
My heart has stopped,My blood rates dropped...AM I IN ACOMA?My feet are cold i'm freezing now so much for my lucky clover i'm not so grand I can barely stand.Mark,"decesed" in my life folder I wake in dread fall out of my bed I guess the nightmares over
2006-10-12 05:27:23 · 12 answers · asked by Vulpix 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
7/10
B+
2006-10-12 05:31:49 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
i think of this a gorgeous poem, with stunning imagery..i assume you have already defined your poem...your partitions represent who you're, and each so often once you have a closed door no one can pass into the room to work out those partitions...with any luck sooner or later you will liberate it :) As for the poem itself, i think of you need to strengthen it by potential of rethinking the meter a sprint because of the fact some lines have been a sprint long and the poem can get sooo plenty extra effective in case you in easy terms tweak it up a sprint right here and there lotsa skill save penning :D
2016-10-02 05:40:45 · answer #2 · answered by murchison 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be frank, I did not like the first two at all.
"Nightmare" has some potential, though...keep writing.
2006-10-12 05:33:04 · answer #3 · answered by Da Whispering Genius 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
negative 12
2006-10-12 05:29:07 · answer #4 · answered by saggy_nutsack 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
- 0
2006-10-12 05:29:38 · answer #5 · answered by Wisdom 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
did you give then 10, then there are 10, do not let stop you from writer
2006-10-12 05:31:47 · answer #6 · answered by justmejimw 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7-very troubling and sad
2006-10-12 05:29:49 · answer #7 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
~if you EDIT, and make it all one poem, it could be really good. a bit dark, but still, really good! seriously though, you need to re-read it, do the (much needed) editing, and it could be good!
2006-10-12 07:23:55 · answer #8 · answered by Kitten2 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
-78
2006-10-12 05:31:42 · answer #9 · answered by Death Virus 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A10 very sad...
2006-10-12 05:31:40 · answer #10 · answered by SUN FLOWER 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋