Is this a good last line for my book?

Question

I know you're not supposed to do this, but one day a good last line just popped into my head. It is the last thing the girl says for her valedictorian speech,as all her friends are running onto the stage, etc. (yes, I am ending on a quote.)
"If I have learned one thing from living here, it is about life and friends. Nobody is pefect, but life isn't about finding friends with the least faults, it's about finding and accepting people who's fault's you can put up with."
I feel it captures my message, and has a good, but unusual moral not often given. Do you agree?

NOTE: I have all the plot planned out, and have it started. I just don't dream up endings without the rest of it.

Answer 1

First of all, I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt that some of this is purely an oversight caused by hasty typing, but I couldn't help but notice the grammar and spelling mistakes.

You misspelled perfect (pefect)

it should be "whose faults" not "who's fault's"

who's = who is and the 's on 'fault' technically would mean possession (which it is not doing) when what I think you mean is faults (plural).

and perhaps it should be fewest faults not least faults

It may capture your message, I'm not the judge of that. But I think your statement that it is an unusual moral not often given is debatable. I think many YA books talk about and show that no one is perfect. Many show that humanity is about embracing one's strengths and accepting one's weaknesses. That's not to say your book can't shed new light on the situation. It is the quality of your writing that matters.

I think it's a little too early in the writing process to lock that in as your definitive last lines...but it is a good beginning for your first draft.

Answer 2

That isn't how I would end it, but I'm not writing the thing. If this is copyrighted by someone else, then just make sure to get permission to use the quote. Personally, I'd find a way to express this sentiment in a more personal manner to the characters you're working with. That would have much more impact for the reader.

Answer 3

Ignore Andalucia. ALL books are cliches if you boil them down to one line. It's what you do with the text that removes them from that category, and we have no idea what precedes the valedictory, so there's no way of telling whether it's a cliche or not.
However, it sounds like you have scope for a super story that leads up to that conclusion.
Good luck!

Answer 4

Excellent. The only suggestion I would offer would be to eliminate the last three words and substtute the word "accept" To "put up with" indicates that you don't care for the situation, but you "tolerate" it.

Answer 5

This sounds so familiar that I think you need to do some research (be careful of plagiarizing) it could cost you more than you're willing to give. Sometimes we read something and it subconsciously comes back to us and we erroneously make it our own.

Answer 6

Yes dear - well it might, but you won't sell many books if the rest of it is cr*p.

Better start working on the plot!

Answer 7

No. This is plagiarism! Or cheating! Get some sleep - take a shower and then put on your thinking cap! TRY AGAIN!!
Good luck!

Answer 8

sounds good i would add 'who's faults i can accept [instead of put up with] or
accepting people with a unconditional love.......

Answer 9

I don't like it because it's too cheesy. You arn't writing a book report, so you don't need to SUM UP the plot. try something more vague.

Answer 10

Cliche.