Sentence #1: Blanche's actions reveal how her past experiences influence her to turn to a world full of deceit and pretentious behaviour due to her refusal to accept reality.
Sentence #2: Upon Blanche's arrival in New Orleans, she creates illusions in attempt to escape reality through constant lies.
-just need help re-wording to make it sound better, especially with more sophisticated vocab?
thanks!
2006-10-11 08:18:43 · 3 answers · asked by Ash 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Sentence #1 is fine. Sentence #2 could use a wee bit of tweaking...
How about: Upon Blanche's arrival in New Orleans, she fabricates illusions in an attempt to escape reality through her constant lies.
lemonlimeemt: There is a 'u' in 'behaviour' (along with many other words), if you use Brit spellings.
2006-10-11 09:03:31 · answer #1 · answered by ChiChi 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
You might want to break this run-on sentence into two separate sentences. Such as...
1. Blanche refuses to accept reality. Her past experiences have lured her into deceptive behaviours. (give example.)
2. Upon Blanche's arrival in New Orleans, she attempts to escape reality through habitual lies. (give an example)
:)
2006-10-11 14:44:38 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Both of those sentences sound fine to me. The grammar is correct; both sentences are relatively well written. They are more than a simple 5th grader sentence. One note: in the first sentence you have the word written as "behaviour"; there is no "u" in behavior.
2006-10-11 08:40:45 · answer #3 · answered by lemonlimeemt 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋