I am doing a project for this, and there this sentence i am not sure if got anything wrong. Need your kind help here.
"In the past and the future, we remain committed to serve our customer with utmost attention, quality care and focused passion in mind. Our goal is to make you feel our sincerity in providing you with the best and experiencing the world-class sales and after-sales-services, a sensation that you’ll never forget."
Please read this sentence, is there any mistake? please correct for me as i need to submit this tomorrow and thanks for your help.
2006-10-11 02:56:15 · 6 answers · asked by Delight4eva 1 in Local Businesses ➔ Other - Local Businesses
We have been comitted to serving our customers with the utmost care and attention, providing quality, passion and a focus which guarantees your satisfaction.
We are a well structured, flexible, assured and proactive team whose goal is to provide you with the best in world class productivity/sales/ agents, and a follow-through of efficient and dedicated post sales services for a smooth and satisfying customer experience.
2006-10-11 03:20:52 · answer #1 · answered by Can I Be Your Pet? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Just a couple of changes:
"In the past and the future, we have been and remain to be committed to serve our customers with the utmost attention, quality care and focused passion in mind. Our goal is to make you feel our sincerity in providing you with the best, and experiencing the world-class sales and after-sales-services -- a sensation that you’ll never forget."
2006-10-11 10:01:03 · answer #2 · answered by London Aussie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
We have always been committed to serve our customers passionately, with utmost attention and quality care in mind and will continue to do so. Our goal is to make you feel our sincerity in providing you with the best and experiencing world-class sales and after-sales-services to offer a sensation that you’ll never forget!
This version is what I suggest.
2006-10-11 10:12:46 · answer #3 · answered by Satish N 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I believe there are several corrections.
"In the past and in the future, we have been and remain committed to serving our customers with utmost attention, quality care, and focused passion in mind. Our goal is to make you feel our sincerity by providing you with world-class sales and after-sales-services, a sensation that you’ll never forget."
2006-10-11 10:08:08 · answer #4 · answered by KikiBelle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hi,
Chk ths out.
In the past and the future, we remain committed to serve our customers with utmost attention, quality care and focused passion in mind.
Our goal is to make you feel our sincerity in providing you with the best world-class sales and after-sales-services, a sensational experience that you’ll never forget !!!
Regds,
Venkat
2006-10-11 10:03:27 · answer #5 · answered by venkat0906 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i liked the first answerers remake
you definately need a comma, or a ; after the word best
2006-10-11 10:34:30 · answer #6 · answered by iammissmess 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋