I am doing a project for this, and there this sentence i am not sure if got anything wrong. Need your kind help here.
"Today as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte ltd for officially launch the yet another grand Axion Autohaus located at Maine Road, aspired to be at the forefront of the industry.
Please read this sentence, is there any mistake? please correct for me as i need to submit this tomorrow and thanks for your help.
2006-10-11 01:51:48 · 4 answers · asked by wishingforpeace 3 in Local Businesses ➔ United Kingdom ➔ Liverpool
Today as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte ltd for officially launch(ing) yet another grand Axion Autohaus, located at Maine Road, aspired to be at the forefront of the industry.
launch becomes launching or could read for the official launch of yet........ you need dividers between (located at maine road, it is a forced thought into the sentece...
I think,,,,this should help
Any teachers of english out there?
2006-10-11 01:57:24 · answer #1 · answered by southernboy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Today, as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte ltd for officially launch the yet another grand Axion Autohaus, located at Maine Road, aspired to be at the forefront of the industry.
A couple extra comma's and you are there.
But just a recomendation, split it up into a couple of sentences so that you don't lose the reader.
2006-10-11 09:01:09 · answer #2 · answered by jdm6235 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Today,as we continuosly search for breakthrough enhancement,we are delighted, and proud, yet humbled, to present and express our heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte. Ltd. for officially launching another grand Axion Autohaus,located at Maine Road,aspired to be at the forefront of the industry."
2006-10-11 09:38:27 · answer #3 · answered by faith 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im pretty sure its a run on make it 2 sentences
2006-10-11 08:54:32 · answer #4 · answered by chris l 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋