I am doing a project for this, and there this sentence i am not sure if got anything wrong. Need your kind help here.
"Today as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte ltd for officially launch the yet another grand Axion Autohaus located at Maine Road, aspired to be at the forefront of the industry.
Please read this sentence, is there any mistake? please correct for me as i need to submit this tomorrow and thanks for your help.
2006-10-11 01:51:28 · 11 answers · asked by wishingforpeace 3 in Local Businesses ➔ United Kingdom ➔ Other - United Kingdom
Try this:
"Today as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancements, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte ltd for officially launching yet another grand Axion Autohaus. Located at Maine Road, it is aspired to be at the forefront of the industry."
2006-10-11 02:01:26 · answer #1 · answered by bulldog_guy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Today, as we continuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present and give our most heartfelt congratulations to Axion Pte Ltd., for officially launching yet another grand Axion Autohaus located at Maine Road, aspired to be at the forefront of the industry."
Comma after today
period and comma after ltd
"ing" after "launch" (launching)
remove "the"
You forgot the quotation at the end
2006-10-11 01:58:03 · answer #2 · answered by Billys girl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Axion Pte ltd, in keeping with its path of industry leadership, has again today earned our sincere congratulations; as it launches yet another grand Axion Autohaus facility located on Main Road.
2006-10-11 02:06:15 · answer #3 · answered by Reddigo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Today, as we contiuously search for breakthrough enhancement, we are proud to present -and offer our heartfelt congratulations to- industry leader Axion Pte, Ltd, for yet another Grand Axion Autohaus, located at Maine Road."
2006-10-11 01:57:58 · answer #4 · answered by The Mystic One 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
First, it sounds like you are trying too hard to show off by using big words.
"Today, as we continue to search for a breakthrough enhancement, we are .... "
also maybe it should have been
"...officially launching another..."
lastly,
"aspired to be" kind of says (to me, anyway) that they pretend to be good but not really. If that's what you want then go for it... otherwise, forget the "aspire" and then just say it
"...Maine Road, to keep [company name] at the forefront of the industry"
-jose-
2006-10-11 02:00:15 · answer #5 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its not in english. Today we presnt heartfelt congrats to ... as they launch the latest Axion autohaus at Maine Rd. Axion continues to be in the vanguard of the auto sales industry.
2006-10-11 01:55:35 · answer #6 · answered by David B 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That sentence is filled with errors and makes no sense when you read it.
Eliminate the run-ons and break the sentence down into cohesive parts. Watch your punctuation. Correct your sentence structure. Watch your verb tenses. Watch your modifiers.
2006-10-11 01:54:24 · answer #7 · answered by kja63 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
only one change
"for the official launch of yet another"
2006-10-11 01:54:24 · answer #8 · answered by cancycrab 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It doesnt make sense, you change the tense halfway through and ltd should be Ltd.
2006-10-11 01:54:13 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
who are you joking you cant make our points wen we anwer this unless you will choose the answer the "best answer"
2006-10-11 01:55:23 · answer #10 · answered by PaMeLa UsI 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋