Soo, I'm not the best writer, and I need help XD
"It encourages readers to start paying attention to the surrounding vicinities, and, not because of their ______ problems, for who she or he is as a whole."
Does it even make sense? Should it be worded differently? What word should best describe problems? Help would be appreciated - thanks!
2006-10-10 23:59:27 · 12 answers · asked by ? 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Thanks for the suggestions! I thought about it too much.
2006-10-11 00:13:10 · update #1
Er...I don't think you know what the term "racist" really means.
This is an essay for my Literature class on Transcendentalism.
2006-10-11 00:14:46 · update #2
Hm...I don't think it deals with their own problems, it's that they shouldn't judge on others based on *their* problems...come to think of it, I probably shouldn't have the word problems in there. Ahh confusing XD But I get the feeling now - thanks all!!
2006-10-11 00:18:05 · update #3
I am having trouble grasping the concept of the quote. What does the statement relate to?
You could try substituting "the" to "their" Remove the word "vicinities and change "surrounding" to "surroundings. So that part of the sentence would read: "paying attention to their surroundings" remove the comma from after the "and".
Try this: "because of their underlying problems............
Also insert "but" after "problems" so that part looks like this: " problems, but for who she .........".
Your new statement would look like this: "It encourages readers to start paying attention to their surroundings and not because of their underlying problems, but for who she or he is as a whole."
I hope this has been of use to you.
2006-10-11 00:19:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anthony 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It encourages readers to start paying attention to the surroundings not becuase of their problems but awareness.
2006-10-11 00:14:45 · answer #2 · answered by har 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
How about ...
"It encourages readers to observe objectively - to leave their own pre-conceptions behind and to look with new eyes at their environment; to see others in a softer focus, as thinking, feeling, people. In finding empathy outside themselves, they can then look at their own difficulties with a fresh perspective."
Would this be closer to what you mean?
2006-10-11 05:30:30 · answer #3 · answered by sincerely yours 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is over wordy and a little vague how about
It encourages readers to attend to their surroundings not just to deal with their personal problems but also to discover who and what they are.
2006-10-11 00:10:46 · answer #4 · answered by oldhippypaul 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I couldn't get the meaning so i would definately reword the entire sentence. Keep it simple. Good books and bestsellers are never difficult to read.
2006-10-11 00:07:06 · answer #5 · answered by guy_darj 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would go with internal or something else relating to the self.
2006-10-11 00:02:47 · answer #6 · answered by iluvkbs 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
respective problems.
2006-10-11 10:47:00 · answer #7 · answered by lollylou 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
racist
2006-10-11 00:07:13 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
personal
2006-10-11 00:05:06 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
own problems maybe?
2006-10-11 00:01:33 · answer #10 · answered by CJ 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋