this is my poem i made it today.im not telling my friends because they will say its gay because they dont like poetry so here goes nuthin.
LOVE HURTS
i dont want to do this any more.i thought friends were supposed to care,they aren't supposed to lie.i looked for my chance and then i finally found it.i took the chance and i now regret it.she said yes,it lasted for six days.life sucks,love hurts,its over,im thru,im almost over you
give me time,ill be ok,i want to cry deep inside,but i cant.life sucks,love hurts,its over,im thru,im almost over you,love hurts.
2006-10-10 17:59:42 · 7 answers · asked by skater0bob 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Sorry, JesseJames, I don't think that's a poem.
It's prose.
Poetry is getting harder and harder to define since it lacks structure more frequently. But in breaking away from structure it has to excel in other areas, such as imagery or artistry of language.
I think you were smart not to show it to your friends.
Sorry for your loss. I'm glad you took time to articulate your feelings. But it's not poetry. Sorry.
2006-10-10 18:10:02 · answer #1 · answered by Ignoramus 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you think love hurts. As far as poems go, I think that it is OK.
2006-10-11 01:04:53 · answer #2 · answered by Allison W 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem would rock if the punctuation was better.
2006-10-11 01:02:34 · answer #3 · answered by 5150 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offence, it's not even a poem. There's no rhyme in it.
2006-10-11 01:02:11 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its good and its true
2006-10-11 01:02:59 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offense but, no!
2006-10-11 01:02:31 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Crap!
Also your g@y!
2006-10-11 01:14:59 · answer #7 · answered by Imrickjamesbeotch 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋