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She dances without music
She sings without the song
She frolicks through the grassy hills
As the day is long
And if you chance to see her
Remember what I've said
She continues living
Even though she's dead
2006-10-10 16:18:10 · 25 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Theater & Acting
I think it is very nice poem... What is it about?
My impression is the way many people live their lives going through the motions, but not seeing what really life is really about. Love, happiness, and dreams. Good job!
2006-10-10 16:38:23 · answer #1 · answered by mykidsmom 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Bittersweet - I like it.
If you're taking sugestions:
"As the day is long" - is the only line I'm not sure about.
knowing of no wrong
forever wild and strong
forever young and strong
as for the people who didn't like frolics (no K) ( I don't mind it)
She plays atop (or amid) great grassy hills
(ps: great meaning large as opsosed to awesome)
I hope that helps!!
2006-10-11 01:37:44 · answer #2 · answered by maggie_bearie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did someone close to you die recently? I believe you are remembering someone special and the poem is very sweet. If you write more, maybe you could turn it into a song.?? A lot of songwriters write about tragedys that have happened in their lives. Think about it!
2006-10-10 23:51:53 · answer #3 · answered by Nana 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Morbid ending. Shocking to say the least.Vivid, Bold, interseting. Packs a punch. Real catchy. Keep up the good work.
2006-10-11 02:08:30 · answer #4 · answered by A Friend 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sort of boring, y'know? It doesn't really give us anything special or interesting to read into or interpret. It doesn't stretch our imagination or give us any particularly poignant images. I mean, it's a great little ditty, and might be a nice drinking song, and has great rhythm, rhyme, structure, and build, but it just doesn't have much content.
Also, 'frolicks' sounds really weird. And forget the person who said use a thesaurus- if you're writing poetry, don't use words you don't full feel comfortable using. You don't need to have elevated speech to write poetry or any kind of intense vocabulary, just talent, skill, and creativity.
2006-10-10 23:27:36 · answer #5 · answered by Skop 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
It sounds very magical. but I don't understand the part about living even though she's dead. but it sounds very nice! keep it up!
P.S. there's nothing wrong with frolicks. as long as you think it fits, it's fine.
2006-10-11 09:19:27 · answer #6 · answered by Rose 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it to tell you the truth! its kind of sweet and then it turns out mysteriously but the part i think that kinda ruined it [for me] is the froliking through the grassy hills. makes me think of the sound of music
2006-10-10 23:26:37 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it. It's nice. If one more person displays how poorly read they are by saying that 'frolicks' sounds weird, I might puke, however.
2006-10-11 08:51:08 · answer #8 · answered by J Bowden Hapgood 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
gre88888888888 effort! i didnt understand what ur tryin to convey but really a sweet one to go thru.see that ending words of each line be a rhyming words.hope to hear more from u
2006-10-11 08:01:29 · answer #9 · answered by kris 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I write music and would love your poem to do this with. It's a great poem.
2006-10-11 00:19:39 · answer #10 · answered by Kitty L 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋