Can someone give me another way to right this sentence with detail and discription
Jane Roland did not die in vain, but died a hero who was killed trying to free her people.
I know it sounds like a really discriptive sentence but it needs to be better and more mature sounding. Please help me.
2006-10-10 15:15:42 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Jane Roland did not die in vain; she died a hero---killed, trying to free her people. (This assumes you can omit a couple words.)
2006-10-10 15:38:21 · answer #1 · answered by samiracat 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Original:
Jane Roland did not die in vain, but died a hero who was killed trying to free her people.
Revised:
Jane Roland, a hero who died in vain simply by trying to help free her people.
2006-10-10 22:27:11 · answer #2 · answered by rowlann 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
May-hap try this :
Jane Roland did not die in vain, but died knowing that she died trying to free her people, whom she was a hero to.
2006-10-10 22:18:45 · answer #3 · answered by Nyki Marie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How about..... The woman Jane Roland, who shall be sorely missed by those she left behind, shall be remembered for her acts of heroism in the face of Truth.
Her Life shall remain exemplary for the light she shines back on us from a distant star. Her Home in Elysium reminds us by issuing this reminder to people with the power to see, feel, and hear as she did..... She not only led her forces into the arena of scrutiny, she paid a price every revolutionary knows he or she will face to pay just like Trotski and Lenin, Che Guevarra,Allende and so on. Outside the tv-eye preferably, because media empowerment instills paranormal activity in the individual praying department..... .For a Freedom Fighter represents more than just a bright spark of light
2006-10-10 22:28:05 · answer #4 · answered by Lady Alma of Avalon Grailguard 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋