365 days have come and gone
still we're here without you
and it just feels so wrong.
it's like we're living in 2 worlds
here on earth, alone
and with you in heaven, that's home.
but we don't know how to get there just yet
because i guess our time's not through
just know that when we can
we'll find our way to you.
and tho we cried and couldn't understand
when the angels came for you
we soon found peace in god's promised plan
for the heaven he had in store for you.
see, god couldn't wait to take you home
to show you everything
you'd never known.
to watch you run
on streets of gold
to see you marvel
at things untold.
to watch you
sing, and laugh, and play
yes, god chose that special day.
and when OUR time is finished
and through;
just watch--
we'll be smiling as god brings us home,
To You.....
2006-10-09 14:43:03 · 10 answers · asked by lifeistough_period 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Visual Arts ➔ Other - Visual Arts
i wrote this just a few days ago on the one year anniversary of my brother's death. i was 16, he was 18. he was handicapped, and he could never walk, or talk, or see, or play or anything. so that's why i make it sound like he was a little kid, because basically he was.
please be honest and tell me if this is good for my age.
2006-10-09 14:43:47 · update #1
I thought this to have been very beautiful and heartfelt. I shows just how deep your love for your brother was. Thank you for having posted it and sharing it with me. You seem to have a gift of putting the pen to paper so to speak. Take care and God Bless.
2006-10-09 14:59:48 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this is very good. You should contact your local newspaper and see if they have a page to remember the lost ones and see if they will run his picture with your poem. Keep on writing.
2006-10-09 14:47:03 · answer #2 · answered by Marcia B 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
im not a big fan of poetry but i liked it. i think youve got talent. or at least a great way to vent your feelings. im sorry for you about your brother but happy that now you can imagine him running and playing
2006-10-09 14:52:16 · answer #3 · answered by whatever 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Personally I think it's great. Wish I could write like that.
2006-10-09 14:52:53 · answer #4 · answered by red260z 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think that's better than good for your age...no joke...i think it's very sweet and it sounds like it belongs in a chicken soup book...
2006-10-09 14:58:47 · answer #5 · answered by lylitalianbeauty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
first of all poems should either rythme or not.
second of all people don't go to heaven.
2006-10-09 14:56:08 · answer #6 · answered by jin8286 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very touching... I really like it! and I'm sorry for your loss
2006-10-09 14:51:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG! I love it~ it's so beautiful! i rwally enjoyed it. it was great! i ....wow! yea it was gret and i promise i am being honest!
2006-10-09 14:51:38 · answer #8 · answered by SupermanLover3 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you have VERY VERY great talent, not jokeing i love it so much it kinda made me cry.
2006-10-09 16:55:51 · answer #9 · answered by angel_boo_2 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that's beautiful
2006-10-09 14:50:57 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋