Story ideas.....?

Question

Ok, I have a story idea, will you tell me if it is good, I have already wrote some of it...so here is the ..summary.
This young woman named Leandra, had just lost her boyfriend Shilah in death, she was in desperarte need of a new life, so she moved to the big apple, and gets a job, working as a part time nurse in Maddison Hospital, she soon realizes her boss Elliot is a jerk and a half. He is gorgeous and the bad thing is he knows it. Soon Elliot and Leandra, start getting closer to one another.At first it hurt leandra to be near this man, but now it seems it hurts more, to be without him, the only problem is he has a girlfriend, they soon break up, and it seems Leandra finally ha everything she wants, or does she?

So what do you think? Was it good? Tell me?

just to add a little bit..


He doesn't really break up with his girlfriend, because he just wants to get in her pants (which he does) but then he just kinda leads her on, until the girlfriend catches them, and so they all have a fight but then he gets in a car accident ( that is how her boyfriend died) and so she makes up her mind that this is the man I want to be with, and so she goes and tries to save him since she is a nurse, and he almost dies, but in the end he is saved, and then he has to leave for paris on a buiness meeting but she is begging him not to go but he does but then later,she b herself goes up to the empire state building (there in NY ) and she turns around and there he is, and she asks why he isn't on the plane to paris and he says because I'd rather be here, and he asks her to marry him and she says.....YES!

Answer 1

You could add a great twist by finding out either of the two:
1) that she finds out soon after dating that he his gay
2) his girlfriend broke up with him, becuase he is a stalker/woman beater.
But if you donot want to do that.....your story sounds great! Have fun. I myself write storys. I am hoping to send one in to Young Authors soon.
Good luck!!!!!!!

Answer 2

the story seems to be a cliched romance story. the question you should ask is, do You think it is good? As a reader, would you want to read more on the subject? if you read a lot of stories like the one you're writing, then there is no point in writing the story. however, if there are not many of this kind of stories out there, than you might have found something good.

Answer 3

I don't quite see the climax, although there is no actual absolute NEED for climax in a story, in spite of how used to climax in stories we may be.