what do you think about this song?

Question

its not finshed yet.hope you like it also the title of the song is left and pealse do not steakl my song i worked really writin on it
here's the the first two verses

She was all alone
because she was diffrent
No one cared about her
ubtill she met you

you told her you be there for her
but then you left her for drugs and popurlarity
and now shes all alone

She was all alone
because she was diffrent
no one cared about her
now she's sad and angry
until she met you
She was happy for the first time
you told her you'd be there for her
but i guess that was a lie
now she's all alone again

She sits on a park bench
wondering why you left
her all alone
with no where to go
no one to turn to

She starts sliting her wrists
to try to make the pain go away
but it only made her feel worse
She tries not to think about you
but in the end she always dose

She sits on a park bench
wondering why you left
her all alone
with no where to go
no one to turn to
she wants to kill herself
to make the pain go away
but she knows sucide isn't the answer
So she crys herself to sleep instead
she sits on a park bench
wondering why you left
her all alone
with no where to go
no one to turn to
One day she snaped
she couldn't stand the memories
of you and her
palying in her head every day

Answer 1

It really isn't very good at all. Sorry, but I have to be honest. Maybe if I heard the melody with it, but from a lyrical standpoint, it just doesn't seem to flow.

Answer 2

Cool. I write songs too! You can email me if you want and we can talk about songwriting. I have written about 30 songs!

Answer 3

I think so far it is going good. like you said its not finishhed. Good Luck! never give up!

Answer 4

TOO CHOPPY, NEATEN THE SYNTAX A LITTLE.

Answer 5

there are a lot of spelling mistakes

Answer 6

don't quit your day job

Answer 7

ok