i waiting for you to come back to me so my heart can finally see we are meant to be
i belived in your lies and you was sadden by my cries
the love we have can never die but the pain i feel
i will always cry
i will still wait for u to come back to me so my heart can finally see we are meant to be
while im waiting for u i hope u are waiting for me
but i know you will see your soul lives inside of me
for as long as your gone i will carry on and one day i'll come to instead of you comig to me
2006-10-08 08:06:37 · 13 answers · asked by Alexandria♥ 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
It depicts some of my feelings..luv it!
2006-10-08 08:10:12 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a nice poem but, you should work on making stanzas and stuff and don't rhyme in the same line spread them out (dont capitalize rhyming words though, i did that to show you what words rhyme;and notice the both are at the end of the sentence in each stanza):
WAITING
Waiting is hard,
it is no fun.
It seems to take Forever, (Rhyme)
but i hope one day we'll be Together. (Rhyme)
I wait for you,
I wait for love.
Its hard to wait for Us (Rhyme)
but my heart i must Trust (Rhyme)
doesnt make much sense but i made an example lol so keep up the good work and i hope you like the advise :P
2006-10-08 08:41:52 · answer #2 · answered by this_kid_is_hot_15_09 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a nice poem, and it is full of pain and disappointment. If this is what you are really going or went through, ask yourself if it would be wise to allow this person back in your life and if you would be able to trust this person again after being lied to.
2006-10-08 08:10:12 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thank you for sharing your poem.It is a beautiful Love's poem.The poem show to me your heart, your feelings.It is beautiful poem.Thank you again for sharing with yahoo's friends.
2006-10-08 08:13:44 · answer #4 · answered by cobrasnake 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the beginning it should be "I'm",and use capital "I"s when referring to yourself,proper punctuation,spelling,etc.Then I'll read it again and say if I like it--I am too distracted by all the grammar errors!
2006-10-08 08:09:38 · answer #5 · answered by MaryBeth 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like it comes from the heart. It's good! :)
2006-10-08 08:08:47 · answer #6 · answered by tysavage2001 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, i does not say porn. i'm a woman. Porn is degrading and sexually offensive. perhaps you ought to get some spelling training online, then perhaps, we are able to study your typing. And yeah, i admire anime too, exceedingly Naruto. you ought to observe Shippuuden with subtitles. it is particularly stable.
2016-10-19 01:00:37 · answer #7 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is a really cute and sad poem u shud keep goin
2006-10-08 08:08:59 · answer #8 · answered by pretty_hot105 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yea i like diz poem it is beautiful
2006-10-08 08:23:07 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice poem.i love poams.you are good at poems!
2006-10-08 08:08:19 · answer #10 · answered by BENDER IS THE BOMB!!! (Fav show) 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋