Touches so soft,
But at times pressing,
Wanting.
Feeling.
Needing.
Demanding.
Words...
Whispered...
In the husky deep voices of teenage boys
Words that could only please a girl,
A silly girl
Who had just escaped
The sweet bounds of childhood
And entered the hell
Of adolescence.
Words...
Sweet.
Pleasing.
Fulfilling.
Delighting.
With meanings behind them...
By the mind of a young twelve year old girl.
Glances...
Filled with lust.
Mystery.
Wanting.
Longing.
Yearning.
Hidden and lost.
In the darkness of their eyes.
Glances...
Stolen by me.
And taken of me..
Thoughts and intentions...
Unknown by me.
Passed under my radar.
Undetected.
Alien.
Strange.
To the my simple mind..
All I wanted...
All I needed...
All I craved...
Was attention.
A hug here.
A hug there.
A hug whore.
Small arms wrapped around...
Around the shoulders of many boys.
My hands clasping each other.
Feeling the hardness of their chests.
The curve of bone...
Their muscular backs and shoulders.
Their warmth...
Feeling a strange happiness fill me.
Like I was filled.
Like I was wanted.
Like I was needed.
2006-10-07 12:31:28 · 7 answers · asked by susannah 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
"A hug whore" meant I loved getting hugs...
2006-10-07 12:46:46 · update #1
I love it! I don't think there are too many adjectives at all, it's a poem about one's feelings if it's super short we can't get a true feeling of one's emotional state. I feel that when reading this I could put myself in the poets shoes. Thank you for sharing this!
2006-10-07 13:05:09 · answer #1 · answered by Julia F 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Too many adjectives. I was a trifle confused but I think I get the point. I don't understand "a hug whore". Is the poem about a teen age girl with slutty thoughts or needs? Or is it about a teen age girl wanting everything from every boy but not getting it? Too confusing....................
2006-10-07 19:41:51 · answer #2 · answered by peg 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sorry, don't get it. Sounds like you are trying too hard. If you didn't use too many adjectives then it may be half way decent.
2006-10-07 19:49:22 · answer #3 · answered by tony_jw 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
WOW...thats really good! Well done! BUT since when did 12 year old girls have radars? LOL
2006-10-07 19:42:04 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Deep thinker.'
2006-10-07 19:39:47 · answer #5 · answered by Bluealt 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very cool. You're talented.
2006-10-07 19:45:39 · answer #6 · answered by beast 6 · 1⤊ 2⤋
its good
2006-10-07 19:38:31 · answer #7 · answered by whijess03 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋