Okay so yesterday, I was having a complete and total writers block about this scary story I have to write for my english class. Today I have a plot line but now I have writers block! I need some input about how its sounding right now, and any feedback about what I could do next. There is a girl who is frustrated with her homework, her computer screen goes blank and the words appear"I'm here Claire" That turns out to be a dream and there is a teenage girl who fell asleep while doing her homework, shes home alone and there is a severe snow storm warning out. The longer she sits there the more afraid she becomes she hears eerie noises and her music box from her dead father, who was killed in Iraque keeps playing a chilling tune, the one it is not meant to. Now I need your help and suggestions about this where can I go with it next? Thank You very much you have already been a GREAT help by taking the time to read this question!!! Have an awesome day!!
2006-10-07 09:06:20 · 6 answers · asked by K! 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
OK you've set the scene so something has now got to happen.
Put yourself in her shoes. What are her reactions going to be? - fear, curiosity and what else?
What is she thinking? Is this my dad, or what? If he is communicating via computer in her dream, will typing something in set up a dialogue? What set the music box off? Her dad, or another spirit? What was her relationship with her dad like?
Could it be an anniversary of his death?
Why is she home alone? Where is her mother and what might be happening to her (i.e. death in the snow storm and her father's spirit trying to reassure her).
Could it be a joke ending, with the cat or something that knocked the music box off? For that to work, you could rack the tension up a bit by having her explore the house room by room.
You have the beginnings of a really good story there. One way of getting past a block is to put yourself in the characters shoes and imagine her reactions. This often gives you a new direction to follow.
2006-10-07 09:31:33 · answer #1 · answered by tagette 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not a bad start. Now have the computer start to type up a story about an ambush in Iraq. Maybe she could see her day being attacked on the screen. End it with an appeal to end the war and bring the troops home. Does that help?
2006-10-07 09:20:12 · answer #2 · answered by notyou311 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like this start. I think the girl will have to have an experience that either changes her life or changes her views and attitude, which changes her life later (I mean she realizes the need for becoming a better person.)
I think this girl is lonely and needs love (=positive responses from others, e.g. her parents or friends ), and she may get into dangerous adventures while seeking this love. Later she may realise she acted irresponsibly and tries to put things right, and finds somebody she could help and this person helps her in return (but you shouldn't be pushy with the moral lesson)
2006-10-07 10:01:24 · answer #3 · answered by Agnes K 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
something stirs, thunder claps she looks up to see a broken window. she never even heard it break. That was freaky.the world goes dark it was pitch black and all was silent except for the harsh breathing of someone or something else in the room! lightning flashes. she sees a gun with blood dripping down it's barrel. now dark. her eyes adjust to the light just as the breathing becomes louder and closer, even more rapid. she feels like screaming but she can't a lamp turns on through the darkness, but there was no power. in the dim light she sees a murderer. (she thinks) who was, ugh green! hold on, it was a living dead. terror sizes her throat as the murderer comes forward with his gun. he wears an army uniform. he looks at the playing music box and steps forward to it. she finally finds her voice just as he was about to grab the box.hey! she shouts it looks up. "That was my fathers don't touch it!" his face looks at her surprised .....it comes further towards her it raises the gun up level with her face, pointing at her. "don't lie" he hissed"it's mine, my father gave it to me when i was a boy!" "but that's not possible!" she yells. he cocks the trigger and says "no matter,i don't care what a silly girl says do you have a name?" "claire." she says. "well claire prepare to... what's your last name?" he asked changing his mind.
ect. ect. you get the point, the zombie thingy turns out to be her father then she wakes up it was only a bad and good dream she thinks. when she looks up she realises that she's not in her room anymore. she sees her father. he tells her to come. she realises the whole world is white he takes her to these golden gates. they are the gates of heven, she was killed by her dead father who took her life from her so they could be together which was fine with her as the next day she planned to kill herself anyways. the note was there, the I love you mom, be strong. suicidal note.
2006-10-07 09:43:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
How bout "ghost" appearing in her dream again. tell what she "feels" during this dream. The chills, the goosbumps that stick out like needles, she's never felt anything like that before...
Now mayb it should turn out the the ghost who's been trying to contact her turns out to be her dad, just showing her that he's still there for her.
2006-10-07 09:14:41 · answer #5 · answered by Pyp 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-16 03:58:30 · answer #6 · answered by mcgoon 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋