If I were given one million dollars to give to a charity or a stranger, I would definitely give it to a charity. If I gave the money just to a random stranger, how would I know if this person wasn’t going to go out and get drunk and buy drugs? By giving the money to a charity, I know the money would be going to a good cause. I would choose a charity that was aimed at finding a cause for AIDS and different types of cancer, in hopes that one day the cures would be found. I would also donate money to a charity aimed at helping people in Africa, especially in the Darfur region who are less fortunate and do not have the means to make enough to even have the essentials for survival. I feel that giving money to a charity would go a lot farther than just donating money to one person.
2006-10-04 14:50:58 · 10 answers · asked by bella 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I'm not looking for anyone's opinion on the topic... just on the punctuation(mostly the commas)
2006-10-04 14:52:04 · update #1
You need a few more commas. One after "given one million dollars," one after "wasn't going to go out" instead of the and, one after "get drunk," and one after "Darfur region".
Also, change "how would I know if this person" to "how would I know that this person", "to a charity, I know" to "to a charity, I would know", "choose a charity that was aimed" to "choose a charity aimed", and "make enough to even have" to "make enough even to have".
On the whole, it's quite good--and I do agree with the content.
2006-10-04 14:59:04 · answer #1 · answered by rocketman0739 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you can't get help with the punctuation uless you revise some of the sentances.
If I had one million dollars to give to a charity or a stranger, I would definitely give it to a charity. If I gave the money just to a random stranger, how would I know if this person were not going to go out, get drunk, and buy drugs? By giving the money to a charity, I know the money would be going to a good cause. I would choose a charity whose top priority was to find a cause / cure for AIDS and different types of cancer. My hope that one day with the help of my donation, they would find cures for these diseases. I would also donate money to a charity aimed at helping people in Africa. I have found in the Darfur region of Africa, where people are less fortunate and do not have the means to make enough to even have the essentials for survival. I feel that giving money to a charity would go a lot farther than just donating money to one person.
I just used Word!!
Good luck!
2006-10-04 15:03:04 · answer #2 · answered by kitkatish1962 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I gave the money just to a random stranger, how would I know if this person wasn’t going to go out (remove "and" insert comma instead) get drunk (insert comma) and buy drugs? By giving the money to a charity, I know the money would be going to a good cause. I would choose a charity that was aimed at finding a cause for AIDS and different types of cancer, in hopes that one day the cures would be found. I would also donate money to a charity aimed at helping people in Africa, especially in the Darfur region (insert comma) who are less fortunate and do not have the means to make enough to even have the essentials for survival. I feel that giving money to a charity would go a lot farther than just donating money to one person (insert period)
I'm an English major, so I hope that helped.
2006-10-04 14:57:17 · answer #3 · answered by Dee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-12-04 06:58:29 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not sure about the comma in " AIDS and different types of cancer, in hopes " ... it seems like it wouldn't need one there or should be made into 2 sentences to flow better
2006-10-04 14:57:37 · answer #5 · answered by uke9999 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Punctuation is perfect. If you ever find yourself in this situation for real, I would suggest you give the money to this stranger. I would not buy drugs!
2006-10-04 15:04:43 · answer #6 · answered by gone 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perfect
2006-10-04 14:53:06 · answer #7 · answered by Einstein 999123 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks good to me.
2006-10-04 14:53:35 · answer #8 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It seems like it's all right
2006-10-04 14:54:40 · answer #9 · answered by ss211_07 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good
2006-10-04 14:58:23 · answer #10 · answered by cjh6793 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋