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I did a essay on ELizabeth PRoctor for the crucible, I'm terrible at organizaing thoughts so I would really appreciate if you could give me suggestions on how I could make it better, or what you think of it. I'm really trying hard for an A. Oh, and I'll give you ten correct best answers, if that's legal for the person who is most helpful, if anyone actually responds to this lol.

Actually I spelled alot of words wrong, I'm human, give me a break. So yes I know the first improvement for my essay is to spellcheck it.

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Elizabeth Proctor may be viewed by some as a cold, callous, unforgiving woman. Truthfully, those adjectives do describe her to an extent, but considering her circumstances, she had the right to express each and every one of these adjectives. Her husband was having an affair with a younger girl, and to add insult to injury, the same girl was threatening her life with accusations of witchery. Yet, through all of the “witch-hunt” hysteria Elizabeth Proctor maintained her integrity and true character as a good loving wife, mother, and Puritan woman. Above all Elizabeth Proctor was a very loving woman.
Elizabeth Proctor was a great mother and faithful wife. She did nothing to deserve the circumstances cast upon her. In a moment of weakness, her husband participated in an affair with a young teenaged girl named Abigail Williams. While Elizabeth was a good person in general, like every other person of the world, she suffered with internal demons, separate from her marria

age. She never viewed herself with much esteem. “John I counted myself so plain, so poorly made.” (1329) Her husband and children provided a sense of security for her. These were the parts of her life that she felt truly defined her. Her husband and children gave her the sense of worth that she really needed. By John betraying the trust that was understood in their marriage, John hurt Elizabeth in more ways than one. If she did not love him she would not have been so badly affected by her husband’s betrayal. He brought question to her self worth. This event surely made Elizabeth the icy being that she had become. This is very understandable, she loved her husband, but did not know how to approach him anymore. He seemed as if a different person to her now. The love between them was evident, even in the coldness of their house. Elizabeth Proctor knew nothing more than loving her husband and children.

In the Town of Salem, Elizabeth Proctor possessed the reputation of a very honest person. She never told a lie. Obviously her reputation meant a lot to her because she had kept it for so long. Yet, she decided to lie to save the life of a man who had hurt her emotionally. This was a great act of love and torture. As a devout Puritan woman, surely in her mind she felt that she would be damned for the lie. She had a choice; she could tell the truth, keep her reputation, save her own life as well as others whom had been wrongfully accused, and bask in the glory of doing so, or she could admit to her husband’s affair, condemning John and surely Abigail, and essentially neglect everyone accused of witchery. She chose to save John. This showed that she had at least partially forgiven him for wronging her. Elizabeth could have been selfish, but she chose not to be. She could not be selfish if she wanted to. She truly loved her husband, and even a mistake as magnanimous in the

Puritan community as adultery, could not make her stop loving him. Elizabeth did what she had to do to save her husband. That is true love.
Elizabeth’s Proctor’s defining act occurred in Act Four of The Crucible, when she is addressing John in the prison. Some may make her out to be cold and nonchalant towards her husband, but this was actually her trying her best to be strong for her husband. At this point, John did not need weakness, or indecisiveness. He needed assurance. “As you will, I will have it.” (1327) As a mother of three boys, and a baby on the way Elizabeth had every reason to want her husband to confess to false allegations. Elizabeth was trying to make John accountable for his own actions by not swaying him either way. Everything inside of her being wanted John to confess, yet, she never begged him to confess, or even to recant his confession when he did. Again, Elizabeth refused to be selfish.

“He may have his goodness now.” (1328) She knew that if her husband confessed to the townspeople, God would know the truth. In the end His judgement is the only one that matters. Sometimes the most loving thing a person can do is nothing.

Elizabeth Proctor was a very loving Puritan woman. Her actions may seem cold and calculating throughout the play of The Crucible, but she stayed strong for her family. She sacrificed her good name to save her husband. She forgave a man who did not deserve to be forgiven. She even let her husband have his very own last bit of peace, not matter how much it hurt her to let him do it. Elizabeth Proctor was truly and strong and loving character.

Answer 1

I think you made some good points and provided evidence. I would also consider the role of a puritan woman. I don't know that I would say Elizabeth did what she did out of love. I would lean more toward the idea of Elizabeth doing what would be considered a dutiful puritan wife. Something to explore, perhaps?