Not a God is it I'm watching,
It isn't just a dream,
It will be with me tommorrow,
But will I feel it then.
In a moment it will be gone I'm sure,
I can't stay here forever,
Soon I'll be dragged back down by life,
But that's what I'm watching isn't it?
Could life really be what it's made of,
Anywhere we go,
If so why do we worshipp God,
Heaven could be here couldn't it?
Why am i sat here watching,
The beauty in others lives,
If there life is so wonderful,
Mine is too, isn't it?
2006-10-04 05:03:43 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Good poem....I like it.
2006-10-04 05:06:28 · answer #1 · answered by chrstnwrtr 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I believe you have translated your state of mind a a point of time.
what you need to do is a Little editing. you have the feeling in the poetry but it lacks the punch. Work on it and ask for reviews again.I bet you will feel proud.
All the best
2006-10-04 14:39:36 · answer #2 · answered by m9rocks 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was really good...u r creative and i am sure u will reach far ....boost ur talent and it will make u a star.
best of luck!
2006-10-04 12:14:43 · answer #3 · answered by FARHA Z 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
makes you think i suppose. I like things like that it's not really boring, i'll tell you that
2006-10-04 12:13:19 · answer #4 · answered by Nunya 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hhmm
2006-10-04 12:07:47 · answer #5 · answered by me 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok
2006-10-04 12:15:57 · answer #6 · answered by cuteboymom 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋