Blame
I blame myself for so much. Am I good enough for anyone? I blame myself so much. So much pain deep within my soul, as I cut it pours out.
I blame myself for how she and hurt me. I could not tell, I could not scream. So I blame myself with the sharp blade.
I blame myself for their death, as well as mine. My skin feels cold, my tears are ice. Come back to me. I blame myself as I cut.
I blame myself for failing so many times. Will I ever make you happy? I believe I won't, and I can't. I blame myself as I feel the cold metal.
I cut so that the pain, and blame may pour out. Please I beg of you to let it pour out.
2006-10-03 13:58:35 · 20 answers · asked by sarahmoonstone 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
This is a very powerful poem, be proud of yourself.
2006-10-03 14:03:57 · answer #1 · answered by Michael R 2 · 1⤊ 3⤋
I think it sounds typical.
However, you do have one or two images that are vivid.
Overall though, I've seen this basic Blah blah blah, I'll cut myself because you left me" teenage angst poem far too often.
My advice:
Write about something besides yourself.
the true "you" will come through without sounding so trite, and you may actually create something
genuine
and
honest
and
unique.
That'd be nice.
2006-10-03 21:03:18 · answer #2 · answered by LEMME ANSWER THAT! 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Your poem is outstanding. However, if you really feel like this I think you need to seek professional help. NOTHING and NOBODY is worth dying for. The only thing worth dying for is ole Glory!!!!
2006-10-03 21:03:08 · answer #3 · answered by Joe 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It's good writing, but you're just trying to get attention. You don't need people to feel sorry for you, really. Instead of writing poems and posting them online for people to say, "Oh, I'm so sorry you feel that way," try going outside and doing something fun. You'll feel better and you'll get face-to-face attention from people who actually care.
2006-10-04 11:28:55 · answer #4 · answered by Mikki 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
well to a normal person they would think u need mental help..but as i being a "cutter" i can understand it..and as well i am a published poet so ..thats 2 for 2..i liked it. maybe u should register it on poetry.com like i did..i have had mine published..look them up on poetry.com under the names lenda betts and danys betts..both are mine. good luck hope to see more of ur stuff..
2006-10-03 21:03:07 · answer #5 · answered by devil_queen_biatch14 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Depressing.
2006-10-03 21:03:23 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
It sound as if you are battling with depression you may need to find a friend and talk with them
2006-10-03 21:02:01 · answer #7 · answered by kitkat 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Its very deep,
I write poems myself and mine are completely different to your's but i do still like it
its deep and it shows that its personal and thought about
well done
2006-10-03 21:03:46 · answer #8 · answered by Boots 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
seems like you need some serious help dear the poem was nice but kinda sad
2006-10-03 21:01:54 · answer #9 · answered by ~*~ Stormy Weather~*~ 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think u need some help ya poem sounds like a cry for attention
2006-10-03 21:02:23 · answer #10 · answered by bridlases 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
i personally think your poem is a reflection of a poor education and lack of mental health.
2006-10-03 21:04:15 · answer #11 · answered by wecair2 2 · 2⤊ 1⤋