Would you read this story?

Question

I started a story called L.O.V.E. It's about a young woman (Lisa Oakman) fresh out of high school, trying to pay her way throught college by becoming a high school librarian! She is soon dragged against her will back into the drama, befriending 5 seniors who gossip and relate to her fresh and young yet wise advise. She spies a guy on the first day, and deveolps a crush. But too afraid to admit her immaturity, she only tells her closest high school friend. Then one of the other girls develops a fling for young Vincent Edwards, who is Lisa's age but is working in the office of the school. The girl Lisa told about her embarrassing infatuation with Vincent is stuck on whether to tell. Lisa claims she is fine with staying friends with Vincent, but to doubt. Then somehow word gets around of her crush, and she is mortified. She CAN'T stay at the job, even though her college is nearby. Someone comments that Lisa Oakman and Vincent Edwars' initials spell out L.O.V.E, and that gives the informed

girl hope, so she is about to tell Lisa of her luck, when Lisa has picked up and left. Vincent is shocked, and can not find a way to contact his friend, who he was thinking about being more with. The seniors are furious with Lisa's betrayel of them, when she did have a chance with her "true l.o.v.e." Five months later, Lisa is working at a kids' camp near her college, which means it is by the high school. She has made new friends, and is dating a vet major. But she still can't stop thinking about the past, the e-mails, her friends, and Vincent. She had chickened out, and was ashamed. Then Vincent shows up and finds her. She tries to be civil, until her new guy arrives! Vince is shocked and hurt. Lisa doesn't know what to do, and is tempted to run away again. But her senior friends show up, matured and wiser than she is in many ways. They encourage her to follow her heart, and catch up over pints of ice cream. Problem is, Lisa's heart and mind aren't in synch, and her sense is against

her. Vince leaves heartbroken. She is ashamed, but her friends stick with her. When it comes time for the seniors to graduate, Lisa can't believe so much time has gone by. She is now engaged to the vet major, and attends the ceremony. Her friends are there, so lovely and grown up, they have changed her, as she had changed them. She learned about how to act her age and still be young at heart. And even if she lost her l.o.v.e, she learned so much. Then Vince shows up, right when she is over him, about time! She is weeping for the passing of time, and he holds her close and kisses her! She finally realizes it is never too late for l.o.v.e., and ends up with Vince. In her staff yearbook, the seniors wrote "Never forget us, Lisa! And always follow your heart! It got you L.O.V.E.!"

What do you think?

Answer 1

No. Because it is unrealistic. To become a high school librarian requires at least one college degree...and at least in my state a school librarian is required to have three years experience as a teacher before becoming a school librarian. So she'd need an undergraduate degree with teaching certification and to have at least started taking graduate classes in library science to have been hired. If you want to keep her in the high school setting...make her an assistant to someone else.

And you might not think it matters if it's "realistic" or not...but remember it's libraries that buy the books and librarians who choose.

Answer 2

It's a nice, sweet story, obviously written by a young person, (not that there's anything wrong with that!). It's good, but it is, after all, a synopsis of the larger, well-crafted story. It needs dialogue, narrative, perspective, scene, etc, of course, but it's workable. It'll be a very nice read when it's actually written as a story.
Good Luck with it!

Answer 3

If you do a search on Yahoo for "critique groups" or writing groups you'll be able to join up and trade critiques with other writers. There are lots of good ones, but beware of the bad ones. You should get both what's good and bad about your story.

Answer 4

Someone would. It's mostly about exposure. Sounds fairly interesting targeting the teen to young-minded middle aged women category.

Answer 5

It sounds good...and with the right publicity...you can get anyone to read anything....so as long as you can spread the word....

go for it girl.....

Good luck

;)

Answer 6

i wouldn't, but it doesn't really sound like my kind of story. you might be able to find someone to read it though. it sounds really obvious about what the ending will be though. it sounds like stuff that i read when i used to read the "teen" books. lol.

Answer 7

Sure

Answer 8

I don't read Young Adult fiction.

Answer 9

i got bored i dont read

Answer 10

i would read it, it seems good