Sweet Dreams
I want this girl can’t you see
How much she means to me
And I can’t get her hard as I try
But my feelings for her will never die
I just wish I could get the chance
To take her to one last dance
So I’ll pray now to the man up above
To spend one night with the girl I love
(Chorus)
Many chances I have had
None end good all end bad
But if I could get that one night
I would make everything right
I’d give the world to this girl
Diamonds, clothes, jewelry, and pearls
Do anything to see her smile
To have a chance
I must be in denial
Somehow I passed the test
Asked her out and she said yes
Perfect is how it has to be
If not then she’ll forget about me
Eight p.m. rolls around
I pick her up for a night on the town
Walk up and knock on the door
It opens up and the crowd starts to roar
She’s so beautiful it’s almost painful
Cause I’m in love with an angel
She’s perfect: smart, funny, and kind
I could stare at her till the end of time
(Chorus 2x)
Now it’s time to take her home
Ignore the calls that I get on my phone
Spend as much time with her as I can
Because a chance like this will never happen again
She says what a good time she had
I reply it wasn’t half bad
And in for the kiss I lean
That’s when I wake…
Up from my dream
2006-10-03 03:48:17 · 21 answers · asked by Zach S 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
it's the **** dude got to give that to u
2006-10-03 03:50:53 · answer #1 · answered by shay 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It really shouldn't matter what anybody else thinks, it's what you think that matters. Did you get your feelings down right? If so, it's a good song. There are alot of songs out there people don't like, it all comes down to what people are going through at the time they here a song that usually hooks them. Stay with it! And yes, I did like it.
2006-10-03 10:55:49 · answer #2 · answered by stever 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, it's kind of typical and trite. I'm not putting you down or anything, keep trying. You should think outside the box. On my band's debut album (The Kreeps: Glow in the Dork), we got songs like "If I Was a Yeti", "You're In Urine", "One Crazy Sum Walks This Town", and so on. Think of the bizarre and unusual.
2006-10-03 10:52:10 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its pretty good, i mean im a song writer and i think it has all the elements of a good song bt personally make the chorus a bit shorter to make it more catchy, thats just my opinion speaking frm experience tho.
2006-10-03 10:51:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A few small lines in it seem slightly grade-schoolish, like young writing. But otherwise I would feel honored to be the girl you wrote this for! Great job!
2006-10-03 10:50:58 · answer #5 · answered by Dayzi 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It seems more like a poem rather than a song, but it's good.
Maybe you should change the title a bit so that the ending isn't so obvious. Something like "dreamy perfection", or the like.
In any case... very good. I like it.
2006-10-03 10:51:45 · answer #6 · answered by Eclipse 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It good, what band or singer or poem inspire you???
The reason I ask is because I've read something like it before. But I'm sure she is going to like it.
2006-10-03 10:53:35 · answer #7 · answered by Cares 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Lucky girl! I'ts beautiful.
2006-10-03 10:56:16 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes,I can see it.It's a complete thought and a loving sentiment.
It could be a pop tune,why not?
2006-10-03 10:58:10 · answer #9 · answered by moebiusfox 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow I really liked that. Good Song, its very sweet.
2006-10-03 10:57:11 · answer #10 · answered by winterheartsguild 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful! It's wonderful! Keep up the good work. We might hear you one day on MTV...
2006-10-03 10:54:07 · answer #11 · answered by Looda_Plavusha 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋