FRIENDS ARE FOR
When a love one dies.
You were always there.
When it was someone to talk to.
You were always there.
Even through courts or trials.
You were always there.
If it was good/bad times.
You were always there.
That is what a friend is for.
If you have any advice I love to hear from ya.If you want to add to it to make it sound right go for it>
2006-10-02 08:41:30 · 11 answers · asked by babykatdream099 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
its nice :)
2006-10-02 08:42:56 · answer #1 · answered by Azul 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When a loved one permanently left
you were there to dry my tears I'd shed
When I needed to express myself to an Angel
you were always ready to hear,so faithful
Even through trials and court cases
your love still shined through the so many faces
if life brought me good or bad
you were always by my side to deal with that
you will forever be my friend
til' the very end
~yours is creative too~
2006-10-02 15:48:16 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's great.To me a poem is personal.What I may like,you may not.Your poem has great meaning.Start a poem journal if you ever get the chance.I started one years ago.I have some half written poems in there and some lines I just thought of.I have went back and used different areas of my writing to write something entirely different.Poetry helps clear your mind.Please don't ever stop.Do it for you! Best Wishes.
2006-10-02 15:57:10 · answer #3 · answered by bamahotT 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's OK...
Just one small thing though... I noticed you used two different tenses... The past and the present...
My advise use one tense present tense or past tense...
Dies and were don't add up... Dies (present). Were (past)
Keep it up... And good luck...
2006-10-02 16:04:45 · answer #4 · answered by Anirod 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really like it but it's sounds kind of robotic.you might want to soften up the way you "say" it.i mean you're not actually saying it,you're writing it but when you say it try to sound softer.
2006-10-02 16:19:54 · answer #5 · answered by charmed_ones_lover 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was cute.keep up the good work.
2006-10-02 15:44:04 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
lame
2006-10-09 21:45:49 · answer #7 · answered by layn22 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's great writting - post it on poetry.com
2006-10-02 15:49:33 · answer #8 · answered by Jana 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
fairly good
2006-10-02 15:45:26 · answer #9 · answered by killjoy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good
2006-10-02 15:46:17 · answer #10 · answered by fancey 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice.Keep it up.
2006-10-02 15:47:03 · answer #11 · answered by willis_is_40 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋