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help me find mistakes in my essay please here it goes


A Special Day in Canada
I got to see Niagara falls this summer, and it was amazing! The water was crashing, booming, and making a cloud of steam above. First we got to see the American side of the falls which was kind of dirty, but it had great attractions. My favorite was the boat ride with my mom, dad, and little sister Jess.
  Next we headed to the border once we got there, there was a man in sunglasses looking big and tough. He was the border patrol. he asked my mom and dad why we were going to canada, the name of people we were visiting, and some other questions i dont remember. After that he opened the back door and asked jess and me our name, school, and some other things to make shure we were my mom and dads kids.
  Now we were in canada! which we quickly noticed it was much cleaner. I have heard Niagara falls looks so much better on the Canadian side, but it was very much the same thing. There were some...

different attractions, but not all of them are that great. for instance, "Journey Behind th Falls". Sounds fun right? Wrong! You do get to got behind the falls, but your in a man made tunnel about 30ft away from the falls. It still must be a good view right? nope! The only time you see the falls is when you get to a seperate tunnel (which you are not aloud to enter) that leads directly to the falls, and all you can see then is water coming down. it basicaly makes the Niagara falls look about 10ft tall and 8ft wide

Answer 1

Did they close off the little island section. I heard they closed some of it down years ago but I didn't know how much.

I went there in the late 70's and if I recall correctly, there was a spot where you could just about touch the water coming down.


"I got"; how about "We went" partly because you are bringing in others during the essay.

not steam but mist

2nd paragraph 3rd sentence, capitalization.

2nd paragraph 4th sentence, something is wrong with "that" either needs a comma or rewording.

Last paragraph needs allot of capitols and you need a period at the last sentence of the paragraph too.

Answer 2

This is how I would have written it (great writing by the way):

My family and I were able to experience Niagara Falls this summer - it was amazing! The crashing and booming of the falling water created a cloud of steam that floated high above. We first observed the falls from the American side. The place could have been cleaner, but great attractions awaited us! My favorite was a delightful boat ride in which mom, dad, and my little sister Jess and I got on.
We then headed north toward the border. There was a man wearing sunglasses looking big and tough when we got to the Canadian boundary. He was a member of the border patrol. He asked my parents why we were visiting Canada. He asked for the names of the persons we were visiting and some other questions I do not remember now. The border patrol guard then opened the back door of our car where Jess and I were sitting. He asked us our name, what school we attended, and some other things that confirmed our identities.
We made it into Canada! My family and I quickly noticed how much cleaner and tidier this part of the falls was compared to the American side. I had heard Niagara Falls looks much better on the Canadian side, but basically it was pretty much the same. There were some...

Answer 3

well since you went with your family you should start it out with.....

My family and I went to Niagara Falls this summer for vacation. We watched the water crash, boom and make a cloud of steam when it hit the bottom of the falls. When we saw the American side of Niagara Falls we thought it was kind of dirty, but it still had some great attractions. The boat ride was my favorite part of my vacation because i was with my mom, dad, and little sister Jess.

the next part of our trip was going to Canada, so we headed to the border. When we got to the border, we were stopped by a big and touch looking man with sunglasses on, which was the border patrol. The border patrol asked my parents why we were going to Canada, the name of people we were going to visit, and some other questions I don't remember. After the border patrol finished talking to my parents he opened the back door of the car where my sister and i were sitting. he asked used our names, name of our school and some other questions to make sure we with our parents.

when we entered Canada we noticed that Niagara Falls was a lot cleaner than the American side. i heard that Niagara Falls looked better on the Canadian side, but it looked a lot like the American side. There were some other good attractions we went to, but we did not care for the Journey Behind The Falls. We had to take a man made tunnel to get behind the falls, but we could not get a good look at the falls from this tunnel. That tunnel made Niagara Falls look about ten feet tall, eight feet wide and we were about 30 feet away from the actual falls. There was another tunnel which led directly to the falls and we were not allowed in it because it was off limits to us.

i hope this will help you, NOW you need to look for all the places the capital letters need to go, because this program does not do that and i did not hit the shift key every time. it was a pretty good story. i hope you got some great pictures, which would also help your book report because the teacher can see what you are talking about and feel like he or she is at the falls themselves.

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Answer 4

I went....got is often misused or over used
making a cloud of mist....steam denotes heat
were going to Canada....country names should be capitalised
and many other questions....makes it sound greater
I dont remember....I should be capitalised
asked Jess....names are capitalised
and me our names....you are talking about two people
to make sure....spelling
mom's and dad's kids....mom and dad are possessive
were in Canada!....country names should be capitalised
noticed was much cleaner....this way or 'that it was'
heard Niagara Falls looks....The place name is Niagara Falls
There were some different....two words
that great:....making a list can begin with a colon this way
"Journey Behind th Falls"...Sounds fun right?....use three dots to interject within the sentence.
a man-made tunnel....hyphenated word
30 feet....in an essay write out words
Nope!....sentences begin with capitals even if only one word interjections
a separate tunnel...spelling
you are not allowed....spelling
and even then all you can...explaining the additional disappointment
It basically makes....capitalise the first word in a sentence, spelling
Niagara Falls....only Niagara Falls, the is unnecessary
look about 10 feet tall and 8 feet wide....write out words

A good story, very minor errors

Answer 5

"A special day in Canada."

Don't call it steam. Mist may be a better word.

"to the border. Once we got there"

", which we quickly noticed, was much cleaner" (no it)

"but not all of them are that great" Not very clear what you mean here. Just a few are great? All are not that great? You could say that "Of all the attractions there I only liked..." Or even better, write about how it was a bit disappointing after you were looking forward to it, if that was the case of course.

"Nope!"

Spelling and capitalization; use a spelling checker.

Make an ending to it. Like an overall statement or how you got home. You named it a special day. Make the day end in your essay and state WHY it was special. So far you just summed up what you did and hardly why it was that special, except for the interrogation by the border patrol. Ad to that part something like, "That was pretty intense" or "I felt like I was in some spy movie."

You wrote the part about "behind the Falls" very well. Here you show what you think about it. That is very good. Try to make that a part in all you write. Not by adding things like "That really was cool," or "That was not so great," but in the way you experienced it not just saying that you did. You see my point?

Good luck.

P.S.: Did you notice how people (mainly me) here can write a longer piece about HOW you wrote it than the actual piece it is about? Amazing isn't it?

Answer 6

Okay, here goes. In your second paragraph, the first sentence isn't correct. It should either have a period after the word "border" or add the word "and" after border to correct the syntax. The third sentence: Capitalize the "H" in the first word: "He", and also Canada, the "I" in the same sentence. The next sentence: your sisters' name should be "Jess", not jess and it should read, "me and Jess, and the word change shure to "sure".

Make sure you look over the entire essay and correct all the misspellings of the word "Canada". It should always have a capital "C".

In your last paragraph, second sentence, the first word should start with a capital letter. "Niagra Falls" is the correct spelling, not Niagara, as you have everywhere in your essay.

Take your time, go over each sentence. Use a dictionary! If you don't have one, buy one. Use spell check, although that isn't always 100% correct, either. Your best bet is a dictionary.
I hope I've been helpful and I wish you lots of luck with your essay.

Answer 7

Proper names are spelled with a capital letter - so Canada and Jess. Also it's Niagara Falls. You have to say "asked Jess and I our names" instead of "asked jess and me our name." There is a spelling mistake in "not aloud to enter" should be "not allowed to enter". Also the other answer about using the word MIST instead of STEAM would be a good correction. Good idea to give a descripton of the boat ride and the way you got wet and how close you got to the falls and the power of the water. and how it overwhelmed you. Make SURE you spell SURE correctly - not shure.

Answer 8

In N Z you without doubt have a couple of expressions which don't seem to be heard in different places, no longer even in Australia. I am southern English, however used to be in Oz for 3 years within the early Nineteen Seventies. Visited N Z round Auckland for a couple of hours at the approach dwelling from Oz by means of sea. But then, what's "English" English or British English? As a long way as I am involved the North (of England) is one more nation for language!

Answer 9

give me some time, i can do it tomorrow/