Rip away my bleeding heart
Right from this very chest
For when it comes to killing me
You do it very best
Tear away this broken soul
And darling, do it fast
Snatch away the world we had
That somehow couldn’t last
Haunt me with the memories
From our relationship
Kill me with your gentle kiss
That lingers on these lips
Darken all my happy dreams
By hunting me each night
Blackening what’s left of me
And ending what was right
Darling, jest keep killing me
That’s all that’s left to do
For death is so much easier
Than living without you
2006-10-01 12:21:28 · 20 answers · asked by Anonymous in Games & Recreation ➔ Hobbies & Crafts
I like it, you are good at writing keep it up!
2006-10-01 12:25:26 · answer #1 · answered by IronWkrMom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i do like it very much.
thats usually what it feels like when you've broken up with some one, but i case nobody has already told you you'll get over it.
i cried everyday for almost a year when my first husband and i split up ( i was 18) then out of the blue one day i just stopped crying. its hard to imagine not being with that person, but its not the end of the world take it one day at a time and later on you'll laugh about it, or be able to talk to some one about who is it in the same position in a few years.
2006-10-03 04:50:46 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I do. Poetry is a great way to put into words what you're feeling inside and it looks like you've described an event perfectly. You should look into publishing it or other ones if you haven't already.
2006-10-01 12:24:29 · answer #3 · answered by Ms. H 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
AWESOME! Like mine?
I've been with you forever,
You just seem to be a never,
I wait for you at night and nothing lasts
Even if you give me the casts
I've been with you from my heart,
With bleeding night,
I cannot stand the fright,
But when your gone I remembered you died.
And every year on that day I cried.
I loved you and much more
Haunt me at night at 4(am)
(But your poems was like tghe best!)
2006-10-01 12:25:29 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love poems and write them but never have published them or put them on the net. This poem is very beautiful, it is written from the heart and from the inner of your soul. Publish it, it is wonderful.
2006-10-01 13:37:13 · answer #5 · answered by Lynn M 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I dont know if its good or not but, why is that most poetry is dark and grim? Is it easy to write like that. let me try
-Theirs a gun to my head
-I think i wet the bed
-Nothing else can be said
-thats because im dead (dun dun duuunnnnnn)
2006-10-01 12:24:44 · answer #6 · answered by The infamous bongblaster 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good stuff, nice and cold-hearted. just change the line "From our relationship" the word relationship is too over used and common for this poem
2006-10-01 12:24:06 · answer #7 · answered by Bo Jangles 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like that, you should put it on a shirt. I got a shirt from Old Navy that has a poem on it, I love that shirt.
2006-10-01 12:31:11 · answer #8 · answered by AlliSon 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your formate good, but I dont like it personaly. That doesn't mean no one else will. It just means it not for me.
2006-10-01 12:24:15 · answer #9 · answered by Sekkennight 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Please make sure you don't go into depression with this "death is so much easier than living without you."
Take care of yourself.
2006-10-01 17:34:02 · answer #10 · answered by lorna56dave 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋