What do u think of this poem?

Question

Tell me HONESTLY what u think about this poem? Do u like it or do u don't like it? Tell me why.



Serenity holds me and it whispers to my soul.
It makes me feel relaxed, it makes me feel whole.
All my worries just wash away.
As on the damp green grass I lay.

The air is moist as if it rained.
It’s freshness is a sweet sap scent.
The sky is blue and as clear as can be.
The sun’s rays gently stream through every tree.

The mystique willow trees hang their branches low
What they hide you’ll never know
Like drapes, you wonder what it holds
Behind the drapes its secrets are untold.

Silence fills the forest
Stillness lays upon
Peacefulness surrounds me

The only thing I hear
Is the footsteps of me
And every breath I take
Or the crunching of twigs that under me brake

Answer 1

I like some things about your poem but not everything. I like enough of it so that overall I can say I like it. The best thing about it for me is that it describes a personal experience that I understand and appreciate, but I think you could improve some of the wording. For example, in the final stanza, I know exactly what you mean, but wouldn't it help to change it to:

The only things I hear
Are my footsteps
And every breath I take
And the crunching of twigs that under me break.

The next-to-last stanza has only three lines. Why? Also, the second line is not complete.

I think you should be encouraged by doing this well, especially if you are young.

Answer 2

Its pretty good. It starts off with long stanzas in the beggining, but towards the end, they get shorter, so you might want to make them somewhat even, in my opinion. It would have a better flow that way. I do like the descrptive words. I could paint a picture in my head from them. Nice job!

Answer 3

Beautiful
It sounds more like a song's lyrics though than a poem because it is descriptive of emotions related to nature.
Very sensitive and emotional. Romantic.
You have talent in telling your links to nature

Answer 4

All alone
Surrounded by nature and her sounds.
Serenity abound
Such peace and tranquility
They are mine for free.
Can I join in
Is there room for me?

(Great stuff you got there, keep up the good work)

Answer 5

wonderful. simply beautiful. it seems like it describes a lonely person, but who is content with his life and ponders the world

Answer 6

I like it. I think it describes a lonely person. I really lived it's words.

Answer 7

It is very beautiful. I like it, of course. It certainly would make a beautiful song