Since you left me
I suddenly became stronger
And became what I can be
And it’s all because your gone!
I think to myself
Why did I hide
All my feelings on the shelf
And put me to the side?
I'm realizing now
I'm standing tall
And able to take a bow
Because all I did was fall.
You made me feel horrible
Like I was nothing
Now you’re not my trouble
I know I“m something.
I wasted my time on you
And than I realized
What I had to do
To not listen to lies.
I had to let you go
And even if it took me a while
It was for the best though
Because all the things you said were vile!
You made me sick
And blinded me
To all it became to thick
But now I can see.
I can see I was used
And not physically
I was thrown and abused
And you did that mentally!
You made me hurt
And why did I stay
Your nothing but a jerk
And I’m happy I’m now away.
All we went through
And all the things you said
When you called me your boo
Is now all dead.
2006-10-01 05:36:26 · 14 answers · asked by kadijah s 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
here's the rest
Thanks for leaving me
All strung and dry
Because you made me see
I can and will get by!
Since you left me
I became stronger
And became what I could be
And it’s all because you’re gone!
(LoL)
and if you dont have anything nice to say dont say anything then :-)
2006-10-01 05:38:35 · update #1
this poem is pretty good but idn there's something about it that's just not catchy. I mean like as I read it i bored of it so I didn't feel like continuing (but I did). But when I was done it's actually pretty okay.
2006-10-01 05:40:49 · answer #1 · answered by BlAcKhEaRt 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First let me say that it wasn't bad but it needs work. Basically the thoughts were there and that's a good sign of a good writer. What you need to do now is become more acquainted with your thesaurus so you cant use words that have the same meanings but express much more power behind them. The poem does not have that grip in it that makes the reader want to continue to read. Generally I would say that if you learn to use stronger words to express yourself, you can definitely make it up there.
2006-10-01 12:54:24 · answer #2 · answered by osito 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem has a direct tone and gives the reader an empowerment that life goes on and can get even better. I enjoyed reading it and keep writing more poems.
2006-10-01 14:39:45 · answer #3 · answered by vwolf 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perceptiveness preached was perfect, but
construction of poetry hasn't been completely conquer by me, so will leave structure judgment to others.
2006-10-01 13:18:50 · answer #4 · answered by Mister2-15-2 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate it. No offense to you, but I just don't like poems. They confuse me. It's good for a poem though. Good job.
PS: I didn't actually read it because poems confuse me. :-)
2006-10-01 12:46:09 · answer #5 · answered by Smarter Than the Average Crayon 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a very good and powerful poem did you make that up becauseits really good
2006-10-01 12:42:02 · answer #6 · answered by dreakay=) 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent....
2006-10-01 12:44:50 · answer #7 · answered by GiGi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats really good!!!!!, I dont really like poetry and i think sometimes it can be boring but this one made me read....... KEEP ON WRITING!!!!!
2006-10-01 12:56:28 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, it's like a mantra of all the right things to say.
2006-10-01 12:44:02 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
That boyfriend of urs is a bas****
2006-10-01 12:46:34 · answer #10 · answered by Alex 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋