it is a poem i wrote.......entitled
cupid's reproach
hide my soul from it's reflection
starving for molested praise
choking on eloquent denial
begging to be adored
illicit thoughts maim vocal chords
refuse to be expressed
falling endlessly towards heaven
in the confines of a tear
hold me in your image
shame me in your smile
blame me for merely breathing
echo my demise
excuse me for my ignorance
embrace me in your chains
dance with my denial
scream with me my pain
shoot me with your arrow
bleed me of my hate
ease this transformation
into a higher place.........
2006-10-01 04:19:18 · 30 answers · asked by echolily 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i am publishing my poetry in a book very soon, and any and all feedback would be lovely. you can see more of it on my 360, if you feel like reading poetry.
2006-10-01 04:22:37 · update #1
I LOVE it! Very creative! You are very talented
Im glad you liked my test!
freaky, wasnt it?
=)
2006-10-01 04:28:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 5⤊ 0⤋
I couldnt finish reading it i got to choked up in middle. Seriously though great poem. You sound intelligent
2006-10-01 11:21:35 · answer #2 · answered by DefenderOfTheMeek22 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, it is just a series of unrelated quotes you probably stole from blogs. Or maybe to just threw a bunch of verbs, adverbs and nouns into some different hats and pulled one out of each hat for your poetry.
2006-10-01 11:31:30 · answer #3 · answered by 8 In the corner 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
gud 1
2006-10-01 11:20:47 · answer #4 · answered by sweetie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nicely done. Keep up the good work
2006-10-01 11:28:33 · answer #5 · answered by searcher 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow looks like a nice song lyrics....its a great poem though
2006-10-01 11:29:32 · answer #6 · answered by melfina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like your word choices. Wish I could get my brain to flow like that.
2006-10-01 11:27:24 · answer #7 · answered by Edward J 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I like it! It's kind of dark and sad though.
2006-10-01 11:22:08 · answer #8 · answered by Adam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh I say dear..........you are a deep one. Try to have more fun, maybe take up sport!!
But the poems not bad!
Dorothy Mills (Mrs)
2006-10-01 11:21:37 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sounds to me like you have issues.
Methinks you need to seek professional assistance before you harm yourself.
2006-10-01 11:21:57 · answer #10 · answered by submariner662 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋