I wrote this poem when I was 16 and now several years later, looking back I'm wondering if its any good at all. Can u plz tell me what do u think of it?
My Perfect Fairytale
Oh,
how I loved that day,
when everything happenned my way,
The skies were green
and the leaves were blue,
I was queen
in a dream so true.
We bumped into each other,
and I stepped onto his toe,
Little did I know,
he was my knight in shining armour.
He gazed into my eyes,
and I noticed a glint of sadness in his,
I felt an urge to share a slice
of his miseries.
And so,
I held his hand
and whisked him away,
to a land
so faraway.
We shared our dreams,
We shared our burdens,
We built a kingdom,
of our own imagination.
Needless to say,
We lived happily ever after,
The perfect way,
to end my fairytale.
2006-09-30 17:59:02 · 13 answers · asked by Anjali 3 in Games & Recreation ➔ Hobbies & Crafts
You're being your own worst critic to ask whether your fairytale/ poem is "any good at all."
Give yourself some credit. It's very good, imaginative, and Inspired.
2006-09-30 19:57:26 · answer #1 · answered by atomiktwin 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The way you think when you were 16 might change as you grow older.
2006-10-01 01:07:03 · answer #2 · answered by Light87 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO, not at all. I think it's a nice poem. Hey, we all need some 'child' sense in our heart. I think nowadays too many people lost their 'inner child' of their heart.
2006-10-01 05:34:24 · answer #3 · answered by asknanswer 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Man when I was 16 all I wrote about was DEATH. Your poem is good if you like fairtales.
2006-10-01 01:23:00 · answer #4 · answered by Eleanor R 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, I do not like it.
It sounds like something a 16 year old would write.
2006-10-01 18:10:39 · answer #5 · answered by mom 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well, I like it. ; )
It is sweet and it does sound like a young person wrote it. If you wanted it you could edit it.
2006-10-01 01:06:23 · answer #6 · answered by tantiemeg 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
no i quite enjoyed it..have u still got it maybe one day you could get it published into a paper or a magazine???
2006-10-01 03:25:02 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
looks good to me.
2006-10-01 02:44:18 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think its pretty good-you should have kept it up.
2006-10-01 01:03:56 · answer #9 · answered by ajm_jr_2005 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i think its very sweet, every sixteen year old girls dream
2006-10-01 16:35:19 · answer #10 · answered by Nora G 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋