I need help with my english?

Question

Hi! I'm chinese! check is there is any spelling, grammer or phrse that is wrong , thankyou.
There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and it was tied onto sticks. Arrowhead can hurt animals, so it is useful when you go hunting. The second tool is a hide scrapper, it is useful too because it can scrap hides and fur off the animals. The third tool is a Travois. Travois is a tool that can carried by animals, I think I would want to have a Travois myself, it is fun to be carried by animals, I think buses or cars are bored!

Answer 1

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is 'the' Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and it 'is' tied onto sticks. 'Arrowheads' can hurt animals, so it is 'a useful tool to go hunting'. The second tool is a hide scrapper. 'This is a useful tool' because it can scrap hides and fur off the animals. The third tool is a Travois. 'A' travois is a tool that can 'be' carried by animals. 'I think I would 'like' to have a Travois 'for' myself, 'because it 'seems' fun to be carried by animals. 'Buses and cars are boring!'


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Answer 2

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is an Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and were was tied onto sticks. Arrowheads could hurt animals, so it was useful when they went hunting. The second tool is a hide scrapper, it was useful too. It could scrape hides and fur off the animals. The third tool was a Travois. A travois is a tool that can be carried by animals, I think I would want to have a Travois myself, it would be fun to be carried by animals, I think buses and cars are boring!
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Just a few little things, thats a corrected version..Pretty good english for a chineese person though

Answer 3

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and it was tied onto sticks. Arrowheads can hurt animals so it's useful when you go hunting. The second tool is a hide scrapper. it is useful too because it can scrap the hide and fur off an animal. The third tool is a Travois. Travois is a tool that can be carried by animals. I think I would want to have a Travois myself because it is fun to be carried by animals.I think buses and cars are boring!
Good english, but just made slight errors and look:

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting.
This sentence is the main idea of the paragraph, so every sentence after this one better relate to it.

I think I would want to have a Travois myself because it is fun to be carried by animals.I think buses or cars are boring!
These two sentences should be taken out because they are not related to the paragraph's main idea. It's giving your opinion on what you like. It's supposed to be about those three weapons, not your opinion on what you like.

Answer 4

There are many tools used by the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and they were tied onto sticks. The Arrowhead can hurt animals, so it is useful when you go hunting. The second tool is a hide scrapper, it is useful too because it can scrap hides and fur off the animals. The third tool is a Travois. It is a tool that can be carried by animals, I think I would want to have a Travois myself, it is fun to be carried by animals, I think buses and cars are boring!

Answer 5

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, three of which are very useful for hunting. The first tool is an arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks that are tied onto the ends of sticks. Because an arrowhead can hurt animals, it is a good tool for hunting. The second tool, a hide scraper, is also very useful because it can be used to remove fur from animal hides. The third tool is a Travois. The travois is a tool that is pulled by an animal. I think I would want to have a Travois myself because it would be fun to ride on. I thinks busses or cars are boring!

Answer 6

Debra, Good job - but keep going. Here is your paragraph with better grammar and punctuation. I've added more information, since your paragraph needed a little more detail.

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe; and there are three tools that are especially useful when they go hunting. The first tool is the arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of certain rocks (usually flint) and created by using a special technique to flake off pieces of stone until they have a sharp point and sharp edges. The arrowheads were then tied on to sticks and balanced with feathers so the arrow would go straight. Arrowheads are sharp and can hurt or kill animals at a distance, which is very useful with fast or dangerous animals.
The second tool is a hide scraper. It is used to scrape hides and fur off the animal skins. The inside of the hide can be scraped smooth and the fur left on the outside to make a warm coat or covering, or the fur can be removed from the outside and the hide becomes leather.
The third tool is a travois. A travois is a pair of sticks or poles tied together so the top section rests on the animals' back - horses, dogs, and even people can haul a travois - and the bottom section drags on the ground behind the carrier. Bundles, food and even blankets for people to ride on can be put on or strapped into the space between the poles. I think I would want to have a travois myself, it sounds like fun to be carried by animals; I think buses or cars are boring!

Answer 7

No comma before “and”. You could actually break the first sentence into two. There’s a lot of info in that first sentence. The second sentence should read “the Arrowhead”. Third sentence should read, “Arrowheads were made from rocks being tied onto the end of sticks”. Arrowheads were made from stones, but the best were from obsidian or volcanic glass. In fact, the desire for this particular stone was so strong, that the plain tribes would travel all over the US trading this “black ice”. But that’s not part of your report; I thought I’d throw that in for free. “Arrowhead can hurt animals, so it is useful when you go hunting.” Arrowhead should become spears or arrows made from arrowheads, since the arrowhead was only part of the tool. Period after hide scrapper. Begin a new sentence with "It is useful because it scrapes the hides off of animals." Did you want to say that the hide scraper scraps off the fur from the hide so it can be tanned? This should read, “The travois is a tool that can be carried by animals. (Actually a Travois is something pulled by animals, like a cart or wagon, not carried) I think I would like to have a Travois myself. It would be more exciting than riding in cars and buses!

Answer 8

"There are any tools in the Blackfoot tribe. Three of them are very useful when they go hunting. One of these tools is the Arrowhead. The Arrowhead is made out of hard rock, and it was often tied onto sticks. Arrowheads made quick kills, so they were useful when the tribes went hunting. The second tool was a hide scrapper. It was used to scalp the animals' hides and fur. The third useful tool is a Travois. The Travois was a tool pulled by their animals. I think I would want to have a Travois myself, because it is fun to be carried by animals (you need to name what animal it is here, instead of just saying "animals" all the time). I think buses or cars are boring!"

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Answer 9

There are many tools in the Blackfoot tribe, and there is three tools that are very useful when they go hunting: the first tool is the arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and they were tied onto sticks. Arrowheads can hurt animals, so it is useful when you go hunting. The second tool is a hide scraper.It is useful, too, because it can scrape hides and fur off of the animals. The third tool is a travois. A travois is a tool that can can be carried by animals. I think that i would want to have a travois myself, because it would be fun to be carried by animals. I think buses and cars are boring!

Answer 10

There are many tools used by the Blackfoot tribe, and there are three tools that are very useful when they go hunting. The first tool is Arrowhead. Arrowheads are made out of hard rocks, and they were tied onto sticks. The Arrowhead can hurt animals, so it is useful when you go hunting. The second tool is a hide scrapper, it is useful too because it can scrap hides and fur off the animals. The third tool is a Travois. It is a tool that can be carried by animals, I think I would want to have a Travois myself, it is fun to be carried by animals, I think buses and cars are boring!