Savage
Slaughtered decency
Dismembered dignity
Running on raw emotion
They’ll use your heart
Like a token
Savage beast
Running on instinct
They might as well kill
For what they think
They’ll rip you up inside
Again and again
You call these things savages
We call them
Men
2006-09-30 09:07:41 · 15 answers · asked by hopelessly romantic♥ 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
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Perfect and oh so true... I love how you ended it. I am a published writer and I think this is very good.
Only thing I would change is " They'll use your heart" to " They use your heart" and "They'll rip you up inside " to "They rip you up inside", so that your tense remains the same.
2006-09-30 09:11:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
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2006-09-30 09:17:30 · answer #2 · answered by ilovedogsandcats17 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-09-30 09:16:08 · answer #3 · answered by car4423 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-09-30 09:10:50 · answer #4 · answered by heidischu2002 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
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2006-09-30 09:10:06 · answer #5 · answered by enroute_bc 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Most of the words don't make sense together. Very over-used. Is the same as calling men dogs.(or other animals...make up your mind) This type of cryptic crap probably make men react like a confused dog.(Tilted head) And it's stereotypical.
What kind of guys do you hang out with....
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2006-09-30 09:32:39 · answer #6 · answered by Xeele 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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only because I right poems, and this one didn't reach to my soul. It was good, but it didn't slice through my skin and reveal a wounded part of my soul. This poem should have done that, but it grabbed my attention, definately.
2006-09-30 09:16:15 · answer #7 · answered by otter7 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i will say a 6 for solid thinking yet to snatch the heartstrings and be influential you will desire to be sparkling and remarkable with your imagery and strike. do you prefer to rally for residing or are you wanting somene else to take administration?
2016-10-15 09:22:51 · answer #8 · answered by saleh 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think that it is a little to mean or like dark. try something like
things in life
never work but
love always does.
2006-09-30 09:11:38 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I tihnk that it is too cliche. I'll give it a 4.
2006-09-30 09:15:05 · answer #10 · answered by nondescript 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋