could you please fix my mistakes please? :-)?

Question

Vlado Petric accepted the assignment, which Pine an American investigator from the International War Crimes offered to him. Vlado’s part of the assignment was that he had to help the IWC to capture a criminal, which seemed odd to Vlado and he predicted that there must be more behind the picture. Vlado had to departure to Bosnia because that was where the IWC planned to capture the criminal.
Vlado is the protagonist or dynamic character who is complex, realistic and changes throughout the story. He used to be a detective back in his home country which was one of the reasons he was chosen. He is a person who thinks outside the box, which means that he is very logical and aware of things that around him. To illustrate this, when the job was offered to him he thought about all the pros and cons before making a decision. Vlado is also responsible and organized because before he leaved Berlin he took care of his family.
Since Vlado is responsible and logical thinker, I feel sympathy for him.
I empathize with him because we have so many in common. For example, he wants to get things done before starting something else. I also believe that I empathize with him because the situations which he went through are kind of similar to what I have been through. I think I understand him pretty well because we a kind have similar personality.
Although, we are so alike, there are several interesting questions that I would like to ask him if he were a real character. One of the questions would be: Why did he accept the assignment, even though it seemed odd? Another question which is a little personal would be: Why didn’t he do anything when he found out that his wife had a relationship with another man.
In short, Vlado is the most interesting character who is very different and complex from the other characters in the novel of “The Small Boat of Great Sorrows”.

Answer 1

yep first you need to indent all your paragraphs.
Why didn’t he do anything when he found out that his wife had a relationship with another man. < other than that great job

Answer 2

I've read your essay and it seems fine to me. I didn't see any typos, and it seems that each time you make an assertion that you back it up with a reason. Seems good to me.

What grade are you in? Knowing that would help me know if your essay is appropriately written for someone at your grade level.

If you're around 6-8th grade, this seems like a good essay to me.