no one made me cry the way
you mke me cry now
thinking about all the
things that we talked abou
I just sit here in class
thinking and feel likwe crying
more and more
because all we had we just letting go
why did it happen to me
what did i do so bad
so i tcan happen to me
know im sitting here thinking
and crying
people coming up to me asking
WHATS GOING ON WITH U KNOW
I NEVER SEEN U LIKE THIS JASMINE
WHAT CAN I DO
all you can do i thinkk it
sit here next to me n think about
what im crying about
and i ask WILL I EVER BE HAPPY AGAIN?
something no one know but us
*the name is ~*~Will I Ever Be Happy Again~*~
2006-09-30 00:25:33 · 4 answers · asked by Jazzy 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
It sux
2006-09-30 00:36:01 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not to hurt your feelings, but it's pretty bad. There are TONS of grammatical errors in the piece, making some of the sentences sound really bad. Also, a comma or some other type of mark (such a s a period, exclamation mark, etc.) goes after every line of a poem.
Here's how I redid it:
~*~Will I Ever Be Happy Again~*~
No one ever made me cry,
The way you make me now.
Thinking about all the good times we had,
It all makes me so bitterly sad,
Every day I feel like crying,
Every day there is more sighing,
I try to let go but I can not,
I fear when I look back, I'll be appalled at how I forgot.
Why did it happen to me
Lord, make me see!
Why on Earth did you pick me?
Lord I know I'll soon see.
Though as for now I sit here crying,
The living see me sobbing, and act as if I were dieing,
They ask what they can do to help,
But only God can heal this wound,
All you can do to help,
Is sit here comforting me,
Help me through my darkest hour,
Sit here and help me see.
A wound I know only God can heal,
That I must also wait for time to feel.
Will I ever be happy again?
Will I ever be happy again.
God can heal you, he works all things out for good for those who believe in him. Try praying to him, he can help.
2006-09-30 01:02:25 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a lovely poem, well done!
i hope your boyfriend see's it and you can work things out!
Good Luck!
2006-09-30 00:35:20 · answer #3 · answered by eiramannej 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it's really cute.. is this specifically for someone? i hope whoever is this for would read it.
2006-09-30 00:58:48 · answer #4 · answered by DruNkStripPeR 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋