Your blood the serenity in my soul
you cant take away, take away, what you can't see
so as long as I hide that my heart still beats
youll never know the pain you caused
[chorus]
my heart is on fire
my soul is barbed wire
touch it and you bleed
love me and you burn
you wanna keep me here to hurt me
well ive got news
(brief pause)
you cant take away what you can't see
[/chorus]
a scar or a bruise I can't tell
im blinded by the pain inside
it came out from behind me
and attacked me when my guard was down
i couldnt hide what was inside me
you saw the darkest part of me
[chorusx2]
you'll never believe the truth behind the smile
pain that runs for miles
truth locked away
so i can be what you need me to be
Just something I wrote when I was thinking... I am 13, by the way.
2006-09-29 07:13:07 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
That's very good, I used to write poetry and short stories when I was about ur age and I don't think I was even close to your ability. Keep it up
2006-09-29 07:20:13 · answer #1 · answered by LilLiE 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW!! Those words are DEEP for a THIRTEEN year old!!!!! I hope you're not LIVING those words!!! Other than that - it's got true meaning and emotion in it. Look on the web for song writers and see where you can go to patton it before someone steals it. Of course you could write down and sing it on tape then mail the whole thing back to yourself. DO NOT open it. Then it is yours.
2006-09-29 14:20:40 · answer #2 · answered by curiousgeorgette 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good job! That's a great song..and for someone so young..
You shouldn't post the lyrics out here like this though...as someone could steal your words from you...get help in getting your lyrics / poems copy-written...Doesn't take much or cost much..and it will protect your future works.
Keep on writing hon...you certainly demonstrate some talent!
2006-09-29 14:23:06 · answer #3 · answered by svmainus 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THat is so awesome. You should put some music to that....I bet it would be great. In fact, if you do find someone to write some music, you should record it for internet play. Email me when you become a star....toocoolyourule@yahoo.com. Good Luck Saara
2006-09-29 14:28:58 · answer #4 · answered by Joey 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's deep. Sorry you have to experience pain like that so young though
2006-09-29 14:18:34 · answer #5 · answered by leilis4 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful and intense. Best wishes!
2006-09-29 14:17:43 · answer #6 · answered by Rachel 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its Ok. Its Nothing I Would Right.
2006-09-29 14:17:05 · answer #7 · answered by mks 7-15-02 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
HEY THAT WAS GREAT!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK...SAD TO THINK THAT YOU MIGHT HAVE EXPERIENCED SUCH PAIN...
2006-09-29 14:17:08 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very interesting i see you're gonna make it in life.
2006-09-29 14:15:50 · answer #9 · answered by love me like me hate me 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats deep and pretty good
2006-09-29 14:16:27 · answer #10 · answered by accvining 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋