Old Poem. I want to hear what people think of it know?

Question

Love,
A bad obsession,
No way out,
Building up depression,
Your confused,
You don’t know what to do,
Your lost in her,
No way out,
Your lips are trembling,
Your heart driving out,
You found a knife,
You think you know what to do,
You think you can cut her out,
And that’s what you do,
But you didn’t know,
All you had was her,
Your lost in nowhere,
All you have is the knife,
You think you know what to do,
So you get cut out,
There was no way out,
Love,


just in case any of you were wondering why, or how i was feeling when i wrote this poem, i was feeling very sad and depressed.... anyways i wrote it because i needed a way to get my emotions out. this is what happened... A few days ago my gf dumped me because she "found someone better," and she's telling me she still loves me and im not sure about what to do anymore.... i want her back more than anything i can think of. she's telling me she wants me back too but she still likes seth... help?

Answer 1

i really like what you wrote.

Answer 2

First of all she did not find someone better, you are the best. she just thought she liked someone else, and if she wanted you back what the h**l is she still doing with that other guy. no female or male is worth all that depression-or sadness, I'm sure there other girls better then her, and given the chance other girls probably like you & would like to go out with you. your still young and have a whole lot of living and girls ahead of you. enjoy life and let her stay with seth- remember what goes around comes around- seth will probably dump her before you know it. you are the best. believe in yourself. and you did the right thing by expressing your emotions in writing it really helps.

Answer 3

No offense ment, but from a Gothic stand point writing it out was the heathy choice and cheers to you for that. It shows alot of pain, thats for sure. But as for what to do, if she honestly told you the other guy was beter than she didnt see the real you. That was a cheap shot. There are some things you reall dont say to people and that is one of them!Give yourself time to heal and think things through before you rush back in where you may be over looked again and again. If you honetly after spending the time to realize you are a great person still want her back then that is your chioce. But you may realize also hey! hes not better than me just different and decide to look for someone who appricates who you are.
Blessed Be

Answer 4

the poem is great, its raw emotion, desperation, your hearts just been ripped out (with or without the knife) to me it shows that you basically live your life for her, through her and that you feel you have nothing else with or without her. Its sad in the way that the writer has lost a sense of himself, that he needs her to go on.

Anyway if you get back with her, can I make one suggestion, please don't loose a sense of yourself, don't put all you have into her, save something for yourself. Still do things for you and things with other friends, you dont want to lose all that too.

Answer 5

this poem is honest, thats what makes it good to read, i also write poems whenever i feel down, it usually helps me get by, i like the poem because of its transitions from using the knife word,you used simple words but managed to make the reader realize your point, its like reading inside a persons soul and journal, keep writing you are good at it
and can become better

Answer 6

It's nice but depressing, and my best advice would be not to get real friendly with a knife. I think you should just tell her how you feel.

Answer 7

Love is just an excuse to get hurt so be smart.If she really love you enough she have no reason to love other guy.Does she have two hearts to give each of you.Dont be hard on yourself love will come your way when it does treasure it and enjoy.

Answer 8

long, plus she sounds really confused, you want her back, she wants you back, so she apparently likes you more than she likes seth.