could anyone critique my college supplement essay please?

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could anyone critique my college supplement essay please?

if you wouldn't mind critiquing my essay, email me.
i would really appreciate it. thanks.

2006-09-27 13:26:00 · 2 answers · asked by shih rips 6 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)

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where is it, it would have been easier if u have the link and we can critique right away. anyway i will e-mail u and and try my best to critique ur essay.

2006-09-27 13:30:50 · answer #1 · answered by ♦cat 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋

i like this essay. i'd change the first sentence although. 'ok, i admit it.' it is a fragmented sentence. i'd rearrange it somewhat. celebration. I even ought to admit that i'm obsessed on Walt Disney classical video clips.

2016-11-24 23:24:38 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋