i had not yet finished it when i posted it and i wanted everyone to see the finished product...tell me what you think and what it should be called.
(verse one)
desolate, here, i sit alone in the dark
i don't (i do not) do not need anyone else
and i can't clear my mind
because i'm thinking of you
i think of you all the time
(chorus)
isolation incases me
but yet this fate still surrounds me
i'm trapped
cannot see
this fate that still surrounds me
(verse 2)
i go around and around
i'm fighting with myself
and i'm pushing all my problems to the back of the shelf
and i say (ya i said) well this is all just a dream
but i just wanna get out\
this makes me just want to scream
(chorus)
isolation incases me
but yet this fate still surrounds me
and im trapped
cannot see
this fate that still surrounds me
(speaking/screaming)
now i cant
(no i cant)
cant get you off my mind
and i think
(i said i think)
about you all the time
(repeat twice)
2006-09-27 10:02:29 · 15 answers · asked by falloutboygirl_13 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
(verse 3)
i'm alone in the dark
it's quiet as the grave
yet this fate still surrounds
and i am filled with fear
i don't think i can be saved now
so just leave me here now
ALONE! ALONE!
(chorus)
isolation incases me
but yet this fate still surrounds me
and i'm trapped
cannot see
all this fate that still surrounds me...
pleaze tell me what you think and be honest...any ideas on how to make it better would be great
2006-09-27 10:07:37 · update #1
That's really good. I'd call it:
Power of You
Desolate
That's really good, my friend told me to put music up on MySpace, there are producers out there looking at it.
2006-09-27 10:07:25 · answer #1 · answered by Penny 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you should find ways to rephrase some of the repeating lines or at least separate them a bit more
This is what i mean:
but yet this fate still surrounds me
i'm trapped
cannot see << maybe a couple more lines to go here
this fate that still surrounds me
I don't know how its supposed to sound, but i think the two "fate still surrounds me" 's are too close together
2006-09-27 10:06:50 · answer #2 · answered by nerveserver 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Encased In Isolation or Encased By Isolation
2006-09-27 10:10:07 · answer #3 · answered by Myke BoDean 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Isolation.
2006-09-27 10:05:43 · answer #4 · answered by Dimples 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think of you get carry of each and all of the coronary heart that is needed Mike. come across a chum with an ear to jot down the music, and it could be super. decide what time and key, and what form of voice first -- then placed it to music please. perhaps bypass the way of: "Proud To Be An American" Anthem type. i'm going to purchase a replica.
2016-10-18 02:18:56 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I generally prefer songs to have a title from the lyrics, so that it is memorable to the audience, but in this case, I might title it "Wrapped."
2006-09-27 10:06:53 · answer #6 · answered by WEIRDRELATIVES 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's good and you should keep on working on it!!
and make some more songs hay you may never know if you might be successful
2006-09-27 10:14:29 · answer #7 · answered by Miss THANG 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it. i can tell that this song means a lot to you. Very emotional.
But i would not suggest posting it in yahoo answers since someone might copy it down and try to steat it from you.
2006-09-27 10:05:29 · answer #8 · answered by keepmewithyou 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hate It.
"Idol Reject No#9"
2006-09-27 10:05:15 · answer #9 · answered by Spaghetti MY 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. You should call it Isolation
2006-09-27 10:30:27 · answer #10 · answered by รкเttlєร 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋