I Have Found Heaven
Like an angel she lay
Her body is the essence of perfection
Her eyes and face show love, compassion, and brilliants in their gaze
With a giddy eagerness I press my body against hers.
Her lips are as sweet as Parisian chocolate
I can feel the warmth of her breast now
Firm, smooth; my hands caress her as if they have a mind of their own
Patience! Patience! It’s becoming harder and harder to have patience.
Her skin is as soft as the finest silk
Her scent can only be described as angelic
Our hearts begin to beat faster and faster
Then the breaking point……..she nibbles my ear
Quickly our attire falls off
Her hands on my back are amazingly soft
I kiss her body with an animal like passion
Her smell and feel are becoming an addiction
I can’t take it anymore; I must be inside her
For a moment I feel like I’m out of control
I press myself against her beautiful flower
Just like that the two of us become one.
It feels as though I have found paradise
Her moans and groans fill me with pleasure
Her sounds are more moving than Beethoven
My desire to please her is more than I can measure
I thrust myself inside her
There is no doubt now; I’ve lost control
Her face, full of passion, makes me feel loved
I feel as though I will soon explode
Our movements coordinate as though our minds are one
She begins to move frantically, forcing me deeper; it won’t be long now
Sounds of passion fill the room as our pace and intensity increase
I must focus, but her impending orgasm occupies my mind
Suddenly it happens; I feel a warm rush inside her as she shakes
I kiss her deeply as my own body begins to quiver; Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
In an instant our juices flow together
Sweat rolls down my face as though all my fluids long to be with her
Panting! Hot! Yet I can’t force myself to role over; I must maintain contact.
My hands, as if nothing has happened, continue their mindless exploration of her body
I stare into her eyes and wonder if she could possibly understand my love for her
Then it hits me; by its very definition, I have found heaven
2006-09-27 08:52:55 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Haha it's a little bit on the personal side
and a bit sexual
but besides that
it's good :-D
2006-09-27 09:01:26 · answer #1 · answered by Amanda 4 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I would have liked to read more about your absolute love of this woman, instead of just havaing sex with her. In some parts, it didn't nessacarily flow, or there was no rythem to the poem. I agree with whoever said it.. that it sounds so romantic in the beggining and then its just like a porno. I think if you chose words that werent so harsh like "thrust" "jiuces" and "OHH!" then it could have been better. Overall, I thought it was a little much... but keep tryin!
2006-09-27 09:06:40 · answer #2 · answered by Kelly 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Was it good for you?
I hear Harlequin is always looking for writers.
Yawn.
2006-09-27 08:55:21 · answer #3 · answered by BlueSea 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
well I'm under eighteen and it doesn't sound like I'm missing much.
2006-09-27 09:03:02 · answer #4 · answered by she who is awesome 5 · 3⤊ 0⤋
like it
2006-09-27 08:55:01 · answer #5 · answered by pinkygirl m 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Little of column A...little of column B..........
2006-09-27 08:54:54 · answer #6 · answered by eastern_mountain_outdoors 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not reading it.
2006-09-27 08:55:00 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
THAT STARTS AS A ROMANTIC POEM
THEN TURNS INTO PORN : )
2006-09-27 08:58:39 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
nice.
2006-09-27 09:02:01 · answer #9 · answered by Vlad 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
lol thats stupid!!!!!
2006-09-27 08:55:14 · answer #10 · answered by mike k 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋