How does this sound for the Anglo-Saxon Poem?

Question

A hot shot sky warrior, skilled in the Squadron
Following the footsteps, his father once made
Fearing failure of living life, his father wanted for him
He breaks all the rules in the heavens above.


As you can see, I NEED HELP! ^_^

Answer 1

I don't recognize anything Anglo-Saxon about what you have written.

Chow!!

Answer 2

you write well but its not smooth. read it aloud to yourself and do you notice how there's a break after every sentence? its not supposed to be like that, its supposed to be smooth.