Fragmented
The Heart is so very strange
If broken it will still work
Surviving life’s every change
And as I talk to the clerk
In the world of lost souls
I can’t help but feel
The huge gaping hole
That I wish would heal
To You I exposed my soul
Then you crushed it to bits
How could I have been such a twit?
To believe that you could love me
But I was insignificant to you
Look how I was a fool
To think that we two
Could be one
2006-09-26 15:28:21 · 6 answers · asked by rry_dvd 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It's very good, but still needs a bit of polishing. Read it out loud. You'll hear where it limps.
2006-09-26 17:16:23 · answer #1 · answered by loryntoo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds raw and developing but to test your skills out try entering it into a poetry contest. There is one at the following link:
2006-09-26 23:04:31 · answer #2 · answered by Lala 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In my opinion, the poem was all about people once inlove,then suddenly became broken hearted.
2006-09-26 22:36:07 · answer #3 · answered by yeday 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very cool. what if you made it symbolic and changed the word heart to something like mirror? try it out....you will really impress the teacher (if this IS for school)
2006-09-26 22:36:47 · answer #4 · answered by unitedf1rst 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good poem.
2006-09-26 22:49:13 · answer #5 · answered by aniski7 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a very nice poem.
2006-09-26 22:34:42 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋