this is the beginning of my paper what grade does this sound like its for.?

Question

“Periodic Table”
On Thursday and Friday of last week I created my own periodic table and with doing so I have first grouped mine according to it chemical properties and the subscripts that had accompanied them. After I was able to break them down into smaller groups I wanted to make it even smaller by grouping them by their physical properties. While I was grouping them according to solids and gases I noticed that some of the gases were colorless and the others had a pale yellow color which had allowed me to further break it down according to colors. This had proved to be the same with the solids; the solids had more defining features such as crystallization, metallic’s, and color....

im not that good with grammar so any good tips would help

Answer 1

I think it does sound good as well.

My only suggestion, so far, since I don't have the entire thing, is to perhaps break the sentences up a little bit more. They are detailed, but long, and most can make two sentences. or just add a comma where appropriate, such as:

"On Thursday and Friday of last week, I created my own periodic table.Doing so, I have first grouped mine according to its chemical properties, and the subscripts that had accompanied them. "

Also, read your paper out loud. Word for word. You will be amazed how you can find small errors in grammar and sentence grouping, as well as adding the appropriate comma, by doing so.

Best of luck!

Answer 2

If I had to guess, I would say high school, 9th or 10th grade.

Ok, grammar/ style tips:
Sentence 1: don't say "and with doing so I have..." I know you did this, you already said so. Don't use I so much unless you are writing a personal narrative.

Sentence 2: It's awkward. I know what you are trying to say, but saying "smaller" twice does not make sense. Try: "After grouping them according to chemical properties, I made the groups even smaller by grouping the elements by physical properties."

Sentence 3: It is a run-on sentence. Try explaining that first you grouped them by solids and gases. Then explain how you further separated the gases. And then explain, as you did in the final sentence, how you separated and grouped them.

Just watch out for run-ons and repeating yourself--try reading your work out loud and see how each sentence flows. Good luck!

Answer 3

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Answer 4

You need some commas in there, and you have some unnecessary words, e.g. : "with doing so" should be taken out, also the"mine " before according should be "them".

Answer 5

Your sentences are too long. Break them up. Besides that, it's fine.

Answer 6

It looks good, very descriptive and observational...good luck!