I AM STANDING HERE
Falling leaves like thoughts or broken things
drifting through the air
the ice crawls slowly up my window pane
the wind whispers "beware"
and I stand still wondering and waiting
for someone else to care
inside my house I store my all
like a castle, or a panick room
but outside I see cold hearts fall
to the tradgedy of careless doom
I want someone to Love me
not to hit and shove me
and so I have been hiding
having no one to confide in
My daughter doesnt know a Father
I can barely remember the man
he ended up in heaven
through the windsheild of a van
And I was alone and she was born
my heart was left bleeding and torn
and after all these miles
and hardships and trails
and little girl smiles
I am standing here
2006-09-24 17:00:14 · 7 answers · asked by Little Wifey 5 in Social Science ➔ Gender Studies
I think your poem is heart wrenching. It is a very pretty poem but I get pain from it. I am sorry for the loss it expresses and I hope that new life sprouts for the writer. Pax.
2006-09-24 17:04:03 · answer #1 · answered by 5375 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful expression of feeling! You write from the heart. From tragedy to Love. I loved it. Keep writing!
2006-09-25 01:00:30 · answer #2 · answered by dancinintherain 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great, if you like that depressing kind of stuff.
2006-09-25 00:02:35 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it is time for you to take part in the poem competition....so best of luck.
2006-09-25 05:00:28 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i didnt read all of it...but sounds good.
2006-09-25 00:01:27 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its realistic
2006-09-25 09:24:13 · answer #6 · answered by Azureskies 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It don't flow.
2006-09-25 00:10:51 · answer #7 · answered by Bev t 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋